http://www.pixiv.net/member_illust.php?mode=medium&illust_id=61351301

is that a translation? because its not very good

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Would love to read this, but the grammar mistakes are so numerous and odd that i feels as if someone threw it into google translate.

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while the grammar is... lackluster, the story is cute. the grammar made Lily sound like Happy.

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raw https://e-hentai.org/g/978627/76866cb62d/

translator needs serious proofeading / better English skills. I would suggest working with someone more proficient in English.

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pg.8
>grope
did you do this in mspaint?

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