I tried fixing it up. Tell me if I made a mistake or not.

Hello, friend, I translated this doujinshi to spanish from this gallery: ( https://e-hentai.org/g/157945/eb454f72b4/ ), and I don't know if I translated the first page dialogue properly. Also, I wanted to tell you that this story has more pages. It's a bit confusing story but here it is:
Majirou, the author of this work, made a CG novel based on a video game called Trapt and in it included a manga style story. Later on, Majirou made another CG novel from a side story where he added more mini-stories in manga style. 3d0xp0xy only translated 11 pages of the 24 that had this mini-history.

Could you please translate the rest of this mini story and the other stories?

Here are the galleries of the CG novels:
*Main story (https://e-hentai.org/g/121738/046272c454/)
*Side story (https://e-hentai.org/g/127825/441646e4e9/)

Sorry if I made a mistake in the explanation, but English is not my mother tongue.

P.S. Thank you for your hard work.

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There's a typo on pg.7: "Miss Alecia", instead of Miss Alicia.

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@conundrum

Technically, her name is Allura.

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Didn't this guy also make a Soul Calibur doujin with Talim in it? Any plans to translate that one? There's just not enough Talim. :(

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The previous translation isn't complete, can you finish it in your Redone version?

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"Nose Air"

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You are the middle piece!!! - Dr. Josef Heiter

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This would be A+++ if it wasn't for the fact that the poop was censored.

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soylent green is people!

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Heh, I guess I never delivered on that promise to improve the typesetting of the original gallery (which was not translated by me, by the way). I completely forgot, sorry. To be fair, that was three-quarters of a decade ago.

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