Should have gone for it while she was still a loli

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"You asshole! I hope you die!"

Just according to keikaku!

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That's just sad

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Greatest love story ever told. A tale of tragedy to rival Romeo and Juliet.

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@JenovasPuppet Still better love story than Twilight.

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Was this even meant to arouse?

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A very sad story. The story should have been ended properly though. Possibly with him dressing her body and then killing himself.

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Holy shit, this is dark.

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Not my proudest fap.

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At first I'm like, "this is a new and interesting style, looks very promising"
Reads further*
Well that killed my boner for the rest of the night faster than you could say "murder-porn"

Omitting the snuff elements, the style is solid and I hope to see more later.

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@Sled_Storm

You can see more right now, just click the artist's tag; Okina's not new, been around for a while.

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Ya its not new, but its the first time he/she has draw actual breasts. as far as I kno okina has only drawn loli stuff.

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Okina does seem to have started moving away from loli more recently, nice to change it up every now and then.

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I took some time to think critically about it while fapping. Was a weird feeling, wouldn't recommend it.

This was fun but I think the story could've been a bit stronger, Maho didn't really have much character once the violence against her started, and she could've been yelling for the man she loved, or trying to use her strength as an athlete. Instead, she's weak and has quickly forgotten all her hopes and aspirations in order to become a begging toy for her attacker. Which is actually a little boring in comparison to twisting the kink a little bit to have her respond with some more personality.

If you think about where plot happens, we learn everything important about the scene and the characters in the first 4 or 5 pages, then, effectively, nothing new happens. She dies, but we already know she's going to die. If she weren't just a mindless begging doll the conflict of her struggling might've added some more pop to the story.

Overall, 10/10, would fap again (I deserve to be kink shamed)
6/10, wouldn't be able to convince friends I read it for the plot.

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The art is great and the girl is cute, and that's all I'm here for.

5/5

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Man this guy has a a real fascination with none-guro random death.

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I want to die like this, but with my ex, I won't kill her though

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Pg. 3...
> 'notes about research...during the war'

...that's going reeeeally low. -_-'

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Art 7. Plot 7. Sexiness 6. Translation 7. All out of 10.

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