Hi guys, I guess I have to apologize, it's been so long since the last edit...
but you have to know that I'm not a professional editor/translator so this work take me a lot of time and I've been very busy lately. I tried my best with this, it really took a while but this manga was worth it.
I looked back at my first edits and I saw a lot of flaws so I'll repost the other Asuna x Kuradeel work with improvements!
I invite all translator to work at this manga even if I did it first because mine is not a perfect translation...
Tell me in the comments how can I improve please! I'm open to suggestions!

Hope you'll enjoy my work

Bye

Thanks for the translation but a few things:

Typesetting in general, spacing between lines, the font of choice and the lack of antialising are quite noticeable, and certainly not a fan of those red hearts.

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Ok thank you! I tried with the red hearts, if a lot of people dislike them I won't put them in my next work

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I for one like the hearts, but that's just my opinion. But they do seem to be used a tad too much.

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Yeah, the red hearts are kind of out of place.

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Yeah, I'm really not a fan of 'colorized' works, no matter how good they are. If the source is b/w then it should remain that way. Otherwise it's just a distraction. The font's are okay, but could use some polishing up, with different fonrts for the loud and emhasis texts bubbles. You can sample the font names used in some other works like SaHa's using "What-the-font" website to backtrace the font names.

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Since you want feedback:

- The lack of capital letters in random places disturbs me a lot. Worse, it makes your work look rushed/unpolished. Like, why do you capitalize the first letter of some sentences, and not others?
- Font is readable but not great IMO.
- Add my voice against the red hearts.

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Seems like someone was salty that Kirito and Asuna was the end game.

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Outstanding, I was hoping this one would get translated, (and if I've said it once, I've said it a dozen times, Asuna getting the bejezus raped out of her is always a good thing.......always :D ), great stuff, thanks a lot for all the effort and sharing :)

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Is this even NTR anymore? WTF is the endgame of this series.

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This translation distracts a ton from an otherwise great work

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@blinkybli thank you! Are there seriously so many errors???😓😓😓😓

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Keep up the good job. Interesting dojin to TL.

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kirito也太惨了呜呜呜我kirito没准也能s的啊

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Adding random color like the red hearts to an otherwise black and white work is always an awful idea. Especially when you're doing a translation, and there isn't any color like them in the original work. It's a jarring contrast that just distracts from the work. You also really need to either pay attention to capitalization, or only use fonts that make everything capitalized.

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@graychaos
Uuugh, sorry guys I didn't think the red hearts would have been so hated, I really liked the idea. I'm gonna upload the nexus pile edge AsunaxKuradeel again with red hearts, but I won't eliminate the previous upload so you can read it without the red hearts ok?
I'm really sorry I don't have time to work on this to remove the hearts, you can find a better translation at doujin.com.
Also, thank you for your advice

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I like this works but the hero seems unluckily.To be honest ,I wish kirito could happy.

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@SusanAnne
I'm finishing my last ntr edit but I'm pretty done with mind break and that kind of thing, I'm gonna translate vanilla too

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Thanks Prupriprupri! I'm looking forward to your updated nexus pile edge AsunaxKuradeel again. Was hoping that you might be interested in translating Kuroi Mono's "Defeated Heroine A" for commission?

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