Hi this is my first comic even i no its not perfect i would love some feedback thanks

my patreon is here https://www.patreon.com/DBTRIXX

thanks

oh yes im also developing a cucking mindbreak game if u are interested

your comic sucks hard

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Intraracial black porn is rarer than interracial black porn these days.

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If your game is plotted out like this comic, then please kill it now before you embarrass yourself anymore. The expressions are overdone, the lighting is terrible and the camera angles are not very flattering. The way this is done looks like you took a bunch of Barbie and Ken Dolls and posed them. It's that bad. If you're going to copy a bad manga plot line, at least put some effort into it.

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@Will W
Oh please you're just saying that because you can't handle a white guy cucking a black guy.

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I don't think it's bad at all. Five stars for effort and first try. Also interested in your mindbreak game.

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@cg8

And you're only defending it because its a white guy cucking a black guy. Shits super rare so I felt obligated to give it a good rating but the dialogue, lighting, and camera angles need work. I hate the barbie hair effect the daughter has as well.

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>p.16
lol did he died
>p. 21
phew
All joking aside, I enjoyed this series.

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