The first part, the arena fight and the tale of enslavement and captivity are a great sequel to the previous chapter. However the excitement dwindles and the plot just seems to get... Stupid, at the rescue stage. What seems to want to be an exciting cliffhanger to leave audiences on is instead just an overly convenient plot point that the audience has likely lost interest in due to the falling excitement in the last part of the chapter.
I'm sorry fixxxer, I love your work and this started out great. But then the tone suddenly changed from dark and erotic to children's cartoon. Perhaps it wouldn't have been so bad if that had happened for only a short bit in the middle. But for it to end on that note was just disappointing. Story development is great but, people are trying to masturbate here, and you already tend to have a bad habit of being a tease and mood killer.

Art 7. Plot 4. English 4. All out of 10.

Base +7, S-One +4, imercenary +9, TheGoodGiggle +2