The revelation that Kotori is behind everything was kind of funny. Although if we're being honest, it always kind of felt like there was something vaguely scary behind her eyes.
Anyways, the TL was really good. Only two minor notes: The line "From now, if you want to scape..." sounds kind of stilted, dunno if you want to change that. Regardless, by 'Scape' you probably meant 'escape'. Only other spelling error was 'Sargent', which should be 'Sergeant'.
Great doujin. This artist has a very nice style. I loved the way he drew Umi. He captured her personality pretty well throughout the entire thing, which was actually really nice! (Considering most people go for "We'll have their general personality for a few pages, then when they have sex we'll just change it to dirty cockslut" so I really enjoyed this). Thanks for the upload!
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