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[hamayaz] Pause! Xenoblade 2 Pyra (English)

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Posted:2018-09-14 19:31
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Language:English  
File Size:66.80 MB
Length:8 pages
Favorited:69 times
Rating:
68
Average: 2.83

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Posted on 14 September 2018, 20:31 UTC by:   ElisaG    PM
Score +12
I don't know Xenoblade games, but I saw the idea of time stopping and feeling everything afterwrds in anothre comic not too long ago.
Posted on 15 September 2018, 02:09 UTC by:   hamayaz    PM
Score -1
hmm I wonder what's the reason for such a low star score. I was planning to do more of these with different game characters, but it seems people don't like it? why though? what don't you like?

@ElisaG
probably cause I learned the concept of time stop very recently from the comic you're talking about
Posted on 15 September 2018, 03:09 UTC by:   rocketdrive    PM
Score +42
the reason is general mechanics of your time stop. It's basically discount netorare by preserving the victim's innocence. This combined with the off looking poses on pages 8 and beyond make it lackluster.

Worst part by far is the EXTREME convenience of rex not noticing ANYTHING wrong until literally the last page as well as pyra not even QUESTIONING how he's doing stuff without even moving makes no sense. This is the stone that sunk THIS ship, but it should not sink the entire idea or series.

The art is good art mostly, and a decent idea for a concept. Your just unlucky you've joined in a time where such an idea is either distasteful because it seems like your pussying out of committing to the correct genre OR the concept to many readers is burnt out because people have seen this done so much you can reskin ALL characters and setting and they'd probably recall like 5 other comics/doujins just like this one.

I would recommend EITHER adding better logic to the characters OR changing the time stop mechanics. You can either have characters not randomly blame nearby peoples to conveniently let this happen and INSTEAD properly question/panic/breakdown as a PERSON would, something that's also been done but shows better character and is more enjoyable to read, OR change it so YOUR time stop mechanic is different. Something not done too many times has been having the girl be conscious of whats happening. Her level of freedom during a stop however is up to you.
Posted on 15 September 2018, 07:15 UTC by:   1bts    PM
Score +0
@hamayaz some people so picky
Posted on 15 September 2018, 09:50 UTC by:   yukikuro    PM
Score +7
@hayamaz
You draw it? Seriously
I appreciate it. Please make more, do you only make xenoblade only? Or you doing from other series too.
If you making more, please post it here. :)
Well your tumblr also will be under my watching list.
Posted on 16 September 2018, 00:48 UTC by:   gearan    PM
Score -2
also it is rather out of character. Pyra would have loved it Rex made an actual move on her. Might only be angry she can't remember how it happened.
Posted on 20 September 2018, 01:39 UTC by:   KiroYakushi    PM
Score +9
If you want to make some more with frozen time, because it does not make a parody of the Kokkoku anime, it would be cool.

I personally liked it, but it was like the staff said, it was kind of weird, maybe if you use more than 1 character get better, leaving more dynamic. My friend BR did these jobs, if you want to take a look, maybe I'll get you some ideas.

https://www.dropbox.com/sh/qe6ka8dehc6xuc2/AADdbfsDK0NzukxJL_xXZqNca?dl=0
Posted on 07 March 2019, 23:36 UTC by:   MachineRX    PM
Score +7
Artistic genius.

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