Hi everyone! :D
This is my third 3d comic: "A Simple Curiosity".
Don't expect a complex story, it comes from a simple idea, but it took me 12 hours to realize it, mostly in Daz Studio 4.10.
I hope you'll enjoy it! :D
Sincerely, TGFan4/FasterFaster (also known as LenioTG on DeviantArt: https://www.deviantart.com/lenioTG)
Here's my Patreon: https://www.patreon.com/LenioTG

EDIT: this story does not represent my current work, I hope the quality of my stories and renders have stepped up quite a bit! :D

Base +4, dawaihih -14, King Chicken -8, Engildarkpod -6, Quatloco -4, 0psi -6, crazyfrogdom -6, Jin.H. +8, bobyjoe3 -6, 神渊之龙 -6, Airresistible -3, Sylvrwolflol -7

well done!

Base +6, Incubus277 +6

Simple Curiosity! Try to take a bite of me! Let me show you just! WHAT! I'M! MADE! OF! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW!

Base +6, verypeeved +6

Hey guys...why 46 votes with an average of 1.61/5???
I get it, this is not a complex story, and it doesn't have any sexual scene, but I think that the renders are nice, and that it's worth the time of reading it!
Please, explain to me, I'm feeling bad because I don't uderstand why I have such low average grade, thanks :'(

Base +6, hartfie +6, Incubus277 +6, Tr2n -9

>Monday November 13th 2018.
>Look at calendar
>November
>Today
>Monday
>12
Immersion ruined, and on page 2. That's pretty damn fast.
Jokes aside, here's my breakdown.

1) The entire thing was way, WAY too slow. Too many steps to accomplish what you wanted, presumably to try and fit a story in it.
2) Text was taking up roughly 1/5th of the page on the bottom and unneeded, when speech bubbles work perfectly fine.
3) Not only that, by limiting yourself to 2 lines of text, you had limited your vocabulary. "I have no right to decide for u". All of that text and you had to limit "you" to "u" to fit it.
4) You had WAY too much negative space. All that space could have been filled in with some generic background or machine filler or something.
5) The blocking of the characters leaves negative space that could be used for aforementioned text bubbles and make the images less negative space-heavy
6) They storyline was very generic and the ending was extremely jarring. Page 38- "No! No! You can't take my life! I want my body back!" 2 pages later... "Boo hoo hoo my life. Did I really want this?" Next page... "Why yes, I did 100% there was no doubt, we'll just ignore what happened about my complaining 3 pages ago."
7) This is e-hentai, where sex is more or less demanded. There are a few exceptions where things without sex get through and a pass, obviously without the Non-H tag, and a lot of the ones I have are wholesome. They don't belong here but because they're so DAMN good and well written, they have high scores. By not having sex, you're putting a huge burden on both the art and the story. To see how that went, see numbers 1-6 above and the number of stars this has. Truth hurts.

I can keep going, but I think I hit a lot of the key points. Here's how to fix this in my opinion, and I gave a few of the same tips to Conflip as well.

1) Cut the transformation frames. He wants to be short, don't make it an argument that takes 5 frames. Make it take 2-3 at most. Every other change had that same issue. You don't need to use a brand new page for every detail as well. Link some of them together into one page where he goes from one height to the next to the final all in one page. It keep the pace fast and with it, keeps the reader's attention. People don't want to read a story where a change happens over the span of an hour.
2) Negative space. Fix that shit. If you don't know what that is, it's all the space that goes unused. I can assume that this reality takes place in a while plane of existence, but that is both lazy and boring. If your story doesn't support well, it's going to fall hard because it's not appealing. Add a background that isn't bland and has some sort of substance. Don't think that a green background with a blue sky will cut it, you need things that actually add value to it.
3 and 4) Blocking, again. Position your characters intentionally to allow for speech bubbles to be used in the same frame as the transformations in some way so it's not intrusive and allows for the story to continue. By doing this, you once again keep the pace relatively fast. This keeps interest and doesn't take over 40 pages to finish in what should have been 15-20.
5) Your story needs work holy christ. It's an idea that came from inspiration, but flesh it out. Don't just spew it out and think you'll get good results and be sad when people vote it down. You need to be more clear in it. As I said in issue #7 above, the character legitimately flips their entire view on the situation without a single problem. It's out of place. If they slowly came to terms a little bit more, then the story flows better. Another example is just how the person has to reply to EVERYTHING the main character wants. She's like a person trying to get the last word in. It's unnecessary. While I understand they're giving instructions, it can be bunched together and she can reply accordingly. This reduces the amount of text and still keeps the story going while not feeling too artificial.

I'll stop here as I have yet to get myself off, so you'll have to find a way to use what I've given you to improve or not. I'm not saying what I said is 100% right, but it's an improvement over what you have in my opinion.

Base +6, reyzal +7, verypeeved +6, Rabaa +7, Tr2n +9

@Tess Verres Thank you for your comment and for taking that time to explain me your thoughts, I appreciate it! :D
I've done a more complex 3D comic before, but it took a looot of time, that I don't have right now. But I still wanted to make a comic that could interest some.
The vocabulary is defenitely limited, but for that I've wrote 3 text stories, and there's a lot of text there, this time I wanted to try something different!
Both the "negative space" and the background regard the problem of time! Every render took around 5 minutes, and this time would have doubled with a background, without mentioning the time needed to create one, and how difficult it's to find good quality freebies.
I think the lack of sex scenes is the main problem here.
I'm sorry that you find this slow, but, if I aggree with the other points, here I disaggree: I hate stories of 5-10 pictures, I like to savour every step of the transformation. And I really hate the usual stories where, after the m2f, the main character craves sex...that's really unrealistic!
Of course the end is oversimplified, but I consider this comic a "casual" one!

PS: I'm sorry for the wrong date, but cheers to you that readed it.

When (and if) I'm going to realize more comics (they take a loooot of time), I hope you'll see some improvements. Thank you for the feedback :)

Base +6, Rabaa +7, reroda +14

I think you're misunderstanding the whole length of a story thing here. I'm not saying condense it into a 5-10 page ultra short story, but the story you have here can be cut in half to like 20 pages with a lot more panel usage and more. Also once again, sex is NOT the massive reason you have a low score. Let me share three links with you.

https://e-hentai.org/g/923654/11e59c7bfe/ A Sonia and Tails Comik
https://e-hentai.org/g/1108638/336767119a/ Erma
https://e-hentai.org/g/1272874/2c6a3ac0a2/ Ichabod the Optimistic Canine

These 3 links all have a few things in common. They all have a score of about 4 or higher, they all are well illustrated, and they all don't have A DROP OF SEX. The last two are the most wholesome things I've ever seen on this website to the point that they just don't belong and yet they have a massively high score to point that they're almost at a 5 star rating. Take a look at what they've done. They have taken the time to draw out the panels, build a short story in a short space. Erma is a comic that starts off with negative space and eventually starts filling it out as the pages go on.

The big issue isn't that there's no sex, it's that you didn't take time to craft a quality product. I read Master of His Domain (2) and that updates really slowly. Tecknophyle also uses a 3D character rendering approach like you and while there is quite a bit of sex in it, I don't follow this 92 chapter behemoth for the sex. If I did I wouldn't be following it. I'd have gotten myself off and moved to something else. I've stayed for the story because I enjoy it so much. He puts time into his renders and story to make sure it's enjoyable. So by saying "Both the "negative space" and the background regard the problem of time!", you're not admitting to a problem, you're making an excuse of it. Quality comes from time, and your score comes from quality. If you can't afford to put the time in, don't expect good results.

Don't down yourself for a low score and don't take my advice in the wrong way as it seems you already are going down that road. Take the time to make a polished piece of work. Look on this website. There are PLENTY of 3D renders that have stories and stuff that have high ratings (Master of His Domain 2 has a 4 out of 5, and not everyone is going to masturbate to 92 chapters of this shit). They go for the crafted story and quality of the uploads. So slow down. Invest your time. If you can't finish it, then stop and take a break. Come back to it later.

Base +6, Rabaa +7, Tr2n +9

@Tess Verres Yes, I'd like to make another polished comic, but I don't have the time right now, unfortunately.
This one is not a polished one, but I personally like it a lot, so I made it for me and I decided to share it with the others.
As I said, with this one my goal was neither the story nor the ambientation, but the physical modifications, and I realized them with much attention! For example, for the face part, I really modified tons of things.
I get what you're saying, but it wasn't my goal for this story. Another comic I made (Give Me Just A Little Bit Of Your Manhood) reflects more what you're saying, but at the time the render quality was awful.
Thank you for your feedback! :)

Base +6, Tr2n -9