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[Aya Yanagisawa] Deviants (Ongoing)

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Posted:2019-06-24 05:22
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Posted on 24 June 2019, 05:22 by:   Viktor0nk    PM
Uploader Comment
Author: "(Here it is! The start of the reboot!

How would you react to being paired up with a hot older woman you’ve never met before? Would you dive in headfirst, be a little cautious, or resist such a cruel fate?)"

Pre-Reboot Story - https://e-hentai.org/g/1402482/bfccfab641/
Posted on 06 May 2019, 05:28 by:   Fenrir26    PM
Score +121
soo... is the original done or is this just a alternative telling of the story
Posted on 06 May 2019, 10:31 by:   Faonir    PM
Score +64
Viktor0nk, in Romania, we have a saying: The old chicken and the young carrot make the best soup. So, to answer your question, I would probably diven in, both headsfrst.
Posted on 06 May 2019, 13:29 by:   Loki The Flameshield    PM
Score +74
Wait...What's going on here? And Cheryl's 37? That sounds...not right. In fact, she looks more like her mother here.
Posted on 06 May 2019, 13:44 by:   dope    PM
Score +128
The original comic lost its way and the artist got bored. So they killed it and rebooting the story.

Same cast with some edits. Different story.

Same Patrons fueling the comic
Posted on 06 May 2019, 17:30 by:   sixugliness    PM
Score +100
Must say I am sad the original comic is over. Though the new art style is not to my liking I still found the story quite interesting.
Posted on 06 May 2019, 23:29 by:   lex15226    PM
Score +89
Aww, i liked old Cheryl better.
Posted on 07 May 2019, 08:50 by:   erana    PM
Score +217
Artist could have at least finished the chapter before rebooting. Or at least finished a "don't leave it in a cliffhanger midd-fight" page before rebooting. You know, just so NOT being a dick. I understand desire to reboot if the storyline was going nowhere, but that was kind of rude towards the readers
Last edited on 13 May 2019, 22:39.
Posted on 09 May 2019, 12:20 by:   allenwalker39    PM
Score +124
So Jameson's not an Incubus anymore? That's quite disappointing, but I'm glad Aya is back.
Posted on 13 May 2019, 06:27 by:   egamer557    PM
Score +188
I am sorry but this isnt deviants for me any more
Posted on 13 May 2019, 07:28 by:   miroku888    PM
Score +99
The patreons seem like cucks for paying this guy to make a comic, and then just bending over and accepting it when he suddenly wakes up one day and wants to nuke the whole thing in favor of a reboot.
Posted on 16 May 2019, 04:41 by:   Bralababa    PM
Score +31
Well, to be honest, patreons probably don't care about story this much, as long as there's porn.
Posted on 20 May 2019, 08:02 by:   erana    PM
Score +342
@God Revan: The authors are atists, but they are also assholes. You wanna reboot a story? Go ahead. Marvel and DC have done that so many times I lost count. You CAN do it. But if you do it in the middle o a story arc, even more, in the middle of a fight scene, whithout even a "sending off" page to give closure to the readers, THAT is being rude. Even worst, needlessly rude. The readers sometimes think they deserve more than they do, but the reverse (authors thinking the readers don't deserve anything) is also false: EVERYBODY deserves common courtesy, readers and authors alike.

And no, "the author is disilusioned with the old story" doesn't cut it - because doing a send-off page does count as starting a new tale PROPERLY (been there, done that) and even a single-panel with a wall of text would have sufficed.
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Posted on 27 May 2019, 13:00 by:   tchubert    PM
Score +199
This would have been better off as its own, self-contained story instead of a reboot.

And @God Revan, really, you're just making things worse.
Posted on 11 June 2019, 01:05 by:   Delta7777    PM
Score +23
You Know I’m just glad that the art style is back
Posted on 18 June 2019, 01:07 by:   God Revan    PM
Score +23
In comparison with the original, I think this version of Cheryl is much better. I kinda like the "MILF" design of her plus she has those hips and bust to get hungry for.
Posted on 24 June 2019, 08:17 by:   Sovann    PM
Score +22
Holy shit! This is REALLY awesome!
Can't wait for more!
Posted on 01 July 2019, 19:04 by:   lex15226    PM
Score +31
They should've made this Cheryl's mother instead.
Posted on 12 August 2019, 08:50 by:   RabidTanker    PM
Score +62
The art is a bit of an step backwards, in my opinion.
Posted on 19 August 2019, 12:49 by:   Omasu    PM
Score +89
Why did you reboot it? I like the first version :'( :"(
Posted on 02 September 2019, 10:58 by:   router25    PM
Score +23
Jameson is lowkey a grownup Pico with a big cock
Posted on 10 September 2019, 07:49 by:   jmendura    PM
Score +122
Writer here, for those wondering why it got rebooted, there were a number of factors as to why it was ended in such a way and I understand why people would get mad at it. I've listed the reasons below but overall I just couldn't keep it going. It just wasn't healthy for me to continue. But I'm happy with this comic. I'm no longer spending half of my paychecks covering costs like I used to do. I no longer have that luxury so I do what I can with the help of those on Patreon and Gumroad. I can't do anymore than that no matter how badly I want to.

Why did I reboot Deviants?
1. No passion. I have been wanting to start over for a long, long time. I can change the direction of the comic but I didn't like the foundation for it. So to me the story would never be to my liking. The sense of closure you'd get from any kind of ending would be incomplete, hollow, and insincere.
2. Patreon changed what was allowed on its platform. That changed the story and forced me to remove content that they didn't approve of.
3. That happened a few years ago and the majority of support for Sexyverse came from the cut content and when that was removed, support dropped drastically. Turns out many patrons were interested in another comic that could no longer be on the platform. That was not a good realization for me.
4. The comic is reliant on financial support, with me paying for over half of the costs myself for over three years. I commission artists to put art to my script and every month I had hoped that I wouldn't be spending half of my paycheck on it. After a while I've had to cut back on content because I couldn't afford it anymore.
5. Sexyverse Games was a side project that grew incredibly fast and proved to be more popular and time consuming. After a while I started seeing continuous growth while Sexyverse Comics continued to decline.
6. That led to me getting a new artist for the comic while putting the comic's original artist to work on our games. Long before that happened Deviants was already dropped to updating once a week and any other comic was cancelled. Reminder that the comic was consistently in decline over the past few years.
7. It got to the point where I had to change back to the original artist and was faced with the perfect time to reboot the comic. Switching artists and then later rebooting the comic would have doubled the whiplash. I know people wanted a satisfying conclusion but it would not have been good.
8. I knew it would rub some people the wrong way but I wanted to start the reboot as soon as possible.
Posted on 26 November 2019, 01:28 by:   Snake_King    PM
Score +24
I can't help but think about what Jameson's reaction will be when he finally meets Lisa and she talks about how she had "fun" with his mom.
Posted on 16 December 2019, 20:09 by:   lex15226    PM
Score +94
I'm glad the artist is back, but this story is just boring now.
Posted on 15 January 2020, 21:41 by:   God Revan    PM
Score +47
These Incest-inuendos and Jameson's reactions are literally fucking hilarious. I can't stop laughing. XD

Like, fuck! Jamie FTW! She's making this chapter full of WIN!
Posted on 29 January 2020, 09:46 by:   Tess Verres    PM
Score +116
Personally, I loved the old story. It was much more enjoyable imo. The new one is not interesting to me because it takes the same characters and rewrites the entire thing while changing the characters around. Characters that I grew to know from the first story. With this reboot, it's now very jarring.

Imagine this: Take The Justice League. Now, rewrite it so they're just civilians who are doing things somewhat similar. They fight crime, but as normal people except like 2 people who have powers. Their personalities are mostly intact, but it's just normal crime fighting. Sure, "Superman" is in it, but it's really some normal dude named Clark Kent who happens to be a regional power lifting multiple time champ who can knock the snot out of most people in one hit. He only has the name "Superman" because he's so strong. That's what this reboot did to me.

On the flipside, if I had never read the original I'd never be in this situation where I am now. I'd actually not be reading it at all as my filters only hit this for tomgirl (to which there's no instance of whatsoever). If I DID read this it would be an interesting read for a bit, but that would be it. Story isn't super interesting, world isn't explained, no backstory on anything.. It's a very "cum and leave" kinda story.

All in all, I think the story itself for me is spoiled by the original story and reusing the characters and rewriting them too. Excluding this, story is bland as it's literally a "fuck my son he needs help" and "meet and fuck" (not saying the original wasn't very meet and fuck, but there was a whole story in it). There's been nothing engaging on this so I'm giving it a hard pass. I'll check back in once in a while to see if it gets any better but likely not since this is the direction the writer wanted it to go from the start anyway. Nothing wrong with that, just not my thing.
Posted on 13 February 2020, 00:01 by:   emperor20    PM
Score +34
I don't approve of NTR, but cockblocking your brother deserves some kind of punishment.
Posted on 01 March 2020, 08:18 by:   God Revan    PM
Score +25
Holy....fucking....shit! Kennedy looking sooo much better in this new drawing style than the original!
Posted on 30 March 2020, 09:24 by:   God Revan    PM
Score +25
Jamie & Kennedy as a thing? Hmmm, I could get behind it.
Posted on 16 April 2020, 11:22 by:   yemaozi    PM
Score +23
我tm社保,,,
Posted on 22 April 2020, 13:42 by:   lyght    PM
Score +64
@Tess Verres I agree with what you are saying but you really should have picked a better analogy. Comicbooks get "rewritten" all the time. That is why there are many different variations of the same characters.
Posted on 29 April 2020, 00:28 by:   *lesigh*    PM
Score +159
The story in this version is, frankly, inferior. The problem isn't the writing; the problem is that, fundamentally, all ideas have a certain amount of potential. For instance, Batman is a more interesting character than Superman Why? Because there's just less you can do with Supes. His power is to have all the powers, but that's kind of the problem. He's too powerful, his lack of limitations places a cap on how engaged we can be, because, at the end of the day, we never really doubt Superman is going to win, and he's probably going to win by punching something really hard.

Batman, on the other hand, is just- a guy, he' just a guy. He's rich, and well equipped, smart and highly trained. But at the end of the day, when he fights Bane, he gets his back broken and has to go through months of intensive physical therapy. Which- is just not a story you can tell with Superman. Ironically, because Batman is less powerful than Superman, you're able to tell a wider array of stories with him. But you know how's even more interesting than Batman? Nightwing, who is who just Batman, but slightly worse.

The same concept applies to concepts for stories. So, what have we done, well, we had a story about a unique individual, an incubus in a world where incubi are supposed to be extinct, there's a mystery, our protagonist is an aberration, how did he come about? Incubi didn't just go extinct, they were hunted to extinction because they're dangerous, there's conflict, people are going to want to control, or hurt him because of what he is.

Now, the story is about a normal human whose mother is a pimp. Also a gigolo I guess.

I struggle to come up with an apt comparison. But I guess it'd be kind of like if you took Baccano! Or like, JoJo or something, and rebooted it, but the reboot is The Melancholy of Haruhi Suzumiya. Like, I enjoy slice of life, but that would be a downgrade, no one would be happy with this, and they would be correct to be unhappy with it.

I can appreciate not wanting to continue a project, I am a novelist, it happens. I can understand abandoning a project, though I find doing so when you are releasing said project for public consumption to be questionable. What I cannot honestly comprehend is taking a project that you are publishing for public consumption, abandoning it, and spinning it off into a structurally inferior story using the same characters.

I just, don't get it.
Posted on 11 May 2020, 14:53 by:   FarkyMac    PM
Score +123
Yeah, this is just...a bunch of aimless fucking.
Posted on 11 May 2020, 21:58 by:   leftrightup    PM
Score +45
@FarkyMac
>What was stopping Aya from picking up the old comic where it left off?
the fact that it's not her comic. She's paid to draw it by the hack writer, it's his comic.
Posted on 18 May 2020, 10:33 by:   Sosenem    PM
Score +123
meh, the previous version was a lot better, now it just feels completely random and silly
Posted on 06 July 2020, 20:47 by:   Nintyfresh    PM
Score +36
can we pay the hack writer to not write, and just let the artist finish the old one because it didn't suck this bad?
Posted on 13 July 2020, 16:17 by:   Ryan WolF Thepram    PM
Score +24
So deviants past from a Harem to randomsex mmm I´m done the art is awesome but i dont like the new history lov to the artist tho
Posted on 21 July 2020, 01:27 by:   Retconner    PM
Score +36
So I'm sitting here wondering what convinced the author to go for a more simplistic story compared to whatever happened in the original.

Also couldn't help wondering what Patreon did that caused the author to change up the original story that caused that mass exodus of his fans from his patreon. What was in the original story that was so bad that Patreon had to complain about it?
Posted on 17 August 2020, 09:58 by:   chibikami    PM
Score +69
Retconner
Patreon implemented a variety of new policies regarding funding pornographic content
notably, depicting incest is now a no-no
Posted on 04 January 2021, 20:06 by:   Evil Tree    PM
Score +27
While I would have liked to have seen an ending for the old comic I support and respect the decision of the writer to start anew. Continuing a project you no longer have love for is not good.
Plus I like the changes made here, tweaking the characters to be more likeable, more variety of Deviant species and a lighter tone that fits better with the premise of a world of sexy crazy monster people.
I'm hoping for versions of XTC and Melinda, maybe Melinda still works with the Enforcers and clashes with Meredith on the Benefactors in arguments that inevitably descend into sex.
Posted on 09 April 2021, 11:25 by:   Sage Windu    PM
Score +48
@velikynovgorod: Uh... what?
Posted on 12 April 2021, 22:33 by:   Oracle 911    PM
Score +26
Page 112 LOL, made my day...
Posted on 28 August 2021, 19:19 by:   Lolzu    PM
Score +37
All right. It's time for me to finally to give my opinion. This will be a long one, so ignore if ya like.

First, I'd like to point out that I've read the first version of Deviant since it came out. I will try to minimize the comparison. However, it will be inevitable as this is a reboot. Therefore, I will criticize the writing quality from the transition of a over arching plot to a simple slice of life story. Let's begin.

First, the characterization is not fleshed out enough. For example, all I know about James is that he can cook, has a big dick and can fuck for hours with multiple partners on the same day, despite being human. While I understand I have to suspend my disbelief in a setting full of monstergirls, the author is asking too much, as the first story James was an Incubus and it was believable for him to have sex without rest. While I consider James characterization to be fine in the first story, here he's okay at best and he's the best character so far, which is not a good sign. As for the rest of the cast, calling them two dimensional would be generous as they only have one character trait and then immediately start fucking. They barely sit down and have a conversation. And even when they do, it's always about sex.

"But Lolzu! Did you expect there to be a story, proper character development and interaction in porn?"

Well...yes. If the writer can pull of a decent story for the first iteration, then I expected for them to do it here. Especially in a simpler story. This could've given them more leeway to further explore the characters and world building in a normal setting. Which other works have already done and better.

"Imagine actually ranting about a porn not having a good story. Lol"

To point out comments similar to this. This isn't a ten page doujin where it's expected for characters to meet and fuck on the fly. This is an ongoing series which is in the triple digits of pages. That's a considerable amount to ask of someone for a shallow story. The first one may not be the best thing in the world, but there were events happening outside of sex. Fuck there were even fights.

This one, James just meets a women, exchange names and fuck. Same thing applies for the rest. A missed opportunity happened with Cheryl's mother. Instead of quickly fucking seconds after meeting, they both could've sat down and discuss what it means to marry a Succubus. Hell, this could've made James hesitate a bit as fucking a whole family Succubus and Incubus could be too much or even kill him. There would be some proper tension in which their relationship could be put to question. Just something else that doesn't have them touching each other's genitalia. I'm sure with the abundance of sex, a couple chapters without it wouldn't be a problem.

Let me list the positives since I don't need to delve to deep on them.

1. Lots of MILFs. Love them mommies.

2. The art is good. Honestly, anybody that can draw at all and that good automatically is a point up.

3.Leprechaun. Cause they're surprisingly absent in a lot of media nowadays. So it's nice to see another short stacked woman that's not a goblin, gnome or dwarf.

4. Casual sex and sex work. It's shown in a positive light and it's refreshing that they don't treat sex like this mystical custom that should only be done during very brief occasions. And I'm glad that James and Cheryl are in a relationship despite that, so that's awesome.

All in all, slightly disappointed with this reboot. I wish there was more to chew on, but maybe there'll be something in the future. Who knows? Anyways. Peace.
Last edited on 29 August 2021, 02:17.
Posted on 28 March 2023, 18:43 by:   God Revan    PM
Score +22
Holy shit! FINALLY! It's been updated! Praise be!!!!
Posted on 18 September 2023, 18:43 by:   Gabby Goat    PM
Score +31
That was a pretty disappointing ending. Especially when they went back on the wincest. They better make up for that in the sequel.
Last edited on 21 September 2023, 05:13.
Posted on 19 September 2023, 01:45 by:   Retconner    PM
Score +29
Let's be real, there wasn't gonna be any incest due to the writer still using that shitshow ya call Patreon...
Posted on 23 September 2023, 16:49 by:   ivanl233    PM
Score -27
All of your comics looks conpletly horrible.
Posted on 30 September 2023, 07:26 by:   God Revan    PM
Score +23
Congratulations to Sexyverse and Aya for completing Deviants! <3
Posted on 01 October 2023, 18:54 by:   BoobSaibot    PM
Score +1
@God Revan What you mean congratulations? The ending was dog trash not only for the reason I mentioned above but it was effortless and rushed . The final chapter was to my surprise in fact the worst chapter. Ain't no congratulations lmao.
Last edited on 02 October 2023, 03:32.
Posted on 31 October 2023, 17:13 by:   cropsy13    PM
Score +12
I thought the first version was better
Posted on 03 November 2023, 05:05 by:   shadowshealth    PM
Score +8
i was really hoping to see the harem fully pregnant and somehow more horny than the MC and driving him in fearful state
Posted on 10 November 2023, 15:01 by:   Ryona Sauce Boss    PM
Score +2
This good kush

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