this is my second upload and part of a bounty
this is the second story I ever translated so hopefully is good enough
ill upload the whole story when it's ready
here are the preview chapters from other groups
cp 1: https://e-hentai.org/g/1009637/b72ce4852e/
cp 2: https://e-hentai.org/g/1116761/d860cdd150/
cp 4: https://e-hentai.org/g/1400420/c8c904bc2b/
cp 5: https://e-hentai.org/g/1401137/9b2454744a/
cp 6: https://e-hentai.org/g/1413921/9f1c42765c/
cp 7: you are here

I hate to hate, but this translation got worse and worse as it went on.

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AHOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON! wtf? Who shouts that while getting fucked in the ass?

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Worst Translation Ever

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I could have done a better translatoin through Google.

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Well this was an incoherent mess. Here's a tip, if english isn't your first language or grammar isn't your forte, then do us a favor and don't translate it. Look, i appreciate the favor but i want to be able to read something without having to figure out what they're saying

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All pages: Im -> I'm
P1: my first timewit / h my [...] -> my first time / with my (no space, edit could be better)
P2: is isane / this little whole [...] -> This is insace, this little hole
P2: Dont do it -> Don't do it
P2: I put it in to the base [...] -> I put it into the base (you could make a better phrase though)

I won't continue sorry. Most of errors are : apostrophes, pronoun ('is xxx' you need to put a pronoun 'It is, this is, etc.'), words missings ('show your wife [...]' -> 'show me your [...]'). You *really* need to have an Editor to help you. You should also put the whole script on Word and check spelling, it can help too.

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When a retarded Spanish guy with a monkey level of English tries to translate a text from Spanish to English guess what happens. Btw, there is an untranslated Spanish part on page 5 as well, so what we have here is not just a grammar problem but also a lack of care and importance.

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While I like the images and story since I kept up the translation of this looks like something the cat dragged in.

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Moms...... Snot........

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English motherfucker do you speak it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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It's not even badly translated, the guy was even too lazy to correctly place the text.

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if you like to complain then do it your self and stop crying at least he did you all a favor and read it then cry like tiny girls

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Labeling this as English is a bit of a stretch...

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This Artist is One of the Best my friends. Thanks.

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Hey, at least this translation was at least better than chapter three. That one was a hot mess. Good on Ero for not simply bashing the translator but giving him tips and advice

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Lol, I thought this was a rewrite at first. What the absolute fuck is going on with this translation and editing?

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I lost IQ trying to decipher this translation

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Lmao she really squirted on her passed out daughter's face. I'm done

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Raw: https://e-hentai.org/s/100464f4e5/1126578-152

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