This was my first attempt at translating. I mainly did it for myself but decided to upload it so that others may enjoy. It isn't perfect but I feel that it is a good attempt.

Not trying to rain on your parade, but from what I've read and comparing it to the source material, this is less of a translation and more of a rewrite. It seems to be following the original very loosely, and at times, whole nuances in the text are chucked out, simplified, or not even there at all in some cases.

Let's take Page 24, for example, and compare it to the original:

これが
18号さんのマンコ…
This is
18-san's pussy...

ゴムはつけな
You've got a rubber?

は…はい…
Y... Yeah...

じゃ、いれろ
Then put it in.

めちゃくちゃ
イヤらしい恰好だ
恥ずかしくないのか?
全然無表情だぞ?
She's in this absolutely
filthy-looking pose.
Isn't she embarrassed?
What's with that totally blank expression of hers?

While there's a place for rewrites here, it's definitely better if you advertise your stuff as a rewrite as opposed to a translation if it's not following the original's story. Nice effort nonetheless, although next time, please make it clear it's a rewrite (and please don't use Comic Sans. God).

But I did notice this thanks to you, so maybe I'll take a little hand at translating it myself.

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Thanks for the feedback. I wasn't aware that there was a rewrite tag. I'll keep that in mind for the future.

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While the line between rewrites and translations can be very small sometimes we thank you for your work regardless.

now for the real question,

is the ending the real one? Because to us pimp/cuck Krillin seems so in character with the canon (before Super of course).

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I'd also like to thank you for attempting this. I hope this won't shun you from having a second, third, etc... attempts in the future!

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Yeah, it's as close to the original ending as I was able to understand.

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