Hi! I'm Chanti! (Mincelot=old pen name) I just got here and tried to promote my work. XD

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It's my first full-colored manga, I spent a loooong time (2016-2017) to complete it so the character looks kinda different between the first page and the last page. (Including his dick)

It's kind of hard to keep up with the plot.

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I agree with @RabidTanker.

A tip for working on future works, if you're going to have a plot that leads up to the smut, do it chronologically. Jumping back into the past while the reader is trying to enjoy the smut every time is a bit jarring.
The first two chapters of having the mc think about how they got into this mess is fine when we're brought back in time when it all began. Then you should continue with the backstory instead of jumping back to the present every time.

Obviously, that may require more pages, but it will make the plot more clear and concise for the reader. The art is good and I understand it can be a hassle to go back and edit all of this so it's better so if you wish to just move on and do other works, please keep the advice in mind when you work on future pieces.

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It’s kind of hard to understand what they’re talking about. Perhaps you should look into a translator? While you’ve done an okay job, I believe there’s quite a bit lost in translation, and taking the time to try to figure out what you’re saying takes away from the enjoyment.

I also agree with @RabidTanker and @MilkTeaEgg - your story jumps around too much. Having a brief scene at the beginning then jumping back a bit is alright, as long as you don’t do it multiple times. It would also be nice to see exactly how he got that big? I mean, you’ve cut out a lot of bits, which is somewhat understandable since the main character’s probably not 100% there, but you’ve cut out too much. Yeah, okay, getting naked and getting rescued can be left out, but it’s hard to get invested when there’s so much you’ve just thrown away.

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Plus, you could've showed more of the mermaid. Of course, it'll take away from the main event; but the backstory can make it easier to get invested in.

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Thank you guys for comments! This story is ended so I'll try to get better in my next story! >< I still have a lot of things to learn...

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