Revised TL

Translated and typeset by [PrettyBoy] fan T/L group; [PrettyBoy] is always open to requests!

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Yeah, it's looking like this is heading down a path where Ochia's gonna have a harem of all these dumb bitches worshiping his dick. Remember when these character's used to be likable? XD

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feels like last page have many translation errors

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@snakety6969
Ochia's doing the Makoto (school days) thing and we all know what happens to him in the end.

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Wait ochiai gf cant be satisfied with his dick?

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Good story, 'till the artist ruined it.

@soltyice
She's not even his GF.

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Good. I'm waiting for orgy or swapping party

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@mahoraking13
I mean, that's kinda what I would like to see happen. I'm kinda hoping for a bittersweet ending where at least some characters realize how shitty they're acting and stop, regardless of whether it's too late or not. But I've read a decent amount of Ippon's past work, and most if not all of his NTR work has dark/sad endings. So yeah, the ending we're most likely gonna get is Ochiai fucking a mind-broken Kaname and Shiori while making Tooru watch. Not sure where Kaname's mom and Sasaki fit in, but I'm sure we haven't seen the last of those cunts either -_-

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Not a good translation

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The series started off pretty good, but all the people around Negumo devolved into backstabbers. So considering who the author is the one guy who isn't acting shitty will probably get the short end of the stick when this all comes to an end.

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As a native Japanese speaker who read the raw version this translation is wrong in many places. No point trying to comprehend this 'translation'.

"まあ別にいーけどよ（女にこまってるワケじゃねーし）。" = "Well, I don't really mind (it's not like I have any shortage of women)"

And somehow you got -"Thats not your fault. Maybe he should man up and treat you right instead."

??? This guy is not even remotely close.

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I tried to do a TL job without even having read the source material
Because it's such a context-sensitive language a lot of things seem to have gotten jumbled up
I've considered reworking this but before I do anymore on this I'm going to read the existing material
thanks for your feedback

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No offense, but I can't see how context has anything to do with some of these speech translations. The sentence I mentioned above as well as the other wrong translations can only be interpreted one way with slightly different phrasing if people are pedantic. Using my example sentence again, there is no hiragana/katakana/kanji in it that mentions 'thats not your fault', 'man up', 'treating you right' or any of that.

先輩とは。。。もうこういう事はしない。。。からあ = "I won't be doing... this sort of thing with you anymore...senpai"
But you got: "I haven't even done this with senpai yet..." You mistook しない (won't do) with してない (haven't done). These sort of errors are all over the place. These aren't context but rather grammatical errors.

I would recommend either taking this down or fixing the translations since all you are going to do is confuse fellow readers who see this.

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would be hilarious if Ochia's doing the Makoto from school days route, and we all know what happened to Makoto..

@its always the decent guys who ends up getting the short stick in NTR stories.

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Chapter 10 when? I know this story is heading bad.

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@Darktaka
Nothing's confirmed (I think), but Nagare Ippon's name is listed in the artists that'll be featured in the next issue of Comic AUN, which I believe is still slated to be released at the end of April. So....here's hoping. And yeah, story's definitely gonna get a lot worse -_-

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"Revised TL"??????

You still have many translation errors throughout this so I ONCE AGAIN have to let people know it isn't correct..... I can't help but doubt how 'well-versed' you are in Japanese or not.

The line "もしかして好きな奴でも出来たのか？” means "What, did you perhaps manage to find a guy you like?" and no where similar to "Are you really done with you favourite guy?"........
THEY AREN'T REMOTELY SIMILAR.

And I am not even going to bother trying to breakdown the second page because apart from some of the first text box it IS ALL WRONG.

I feel sorry for all the people who have read this and now are misunderstanding the contents of this chapter and the overall story. Everyone, just go to the new released translation and don't even bother with this. (https://e-hentai.org/g/1604807/943cfbe4f6/)

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> the second page is ALL WRONG
there is ONE difference between the TL you posted and mine

> I feel sorry for all the people who have read this...
I feel sorry but mostly for you; go larp somewhere else

Last edited on 06 April 2020, 09:46.

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Guess I have to tear this TL apart again then...

(まあいいやせいぜいぞの彼氏を悦ばせてやりなよ）Translates to "Well whatever, do your best to try please this boyfriend" And somehow you google translated it to "I'm sure he can't please you like I can anyway"
Good to see that you managed to get zero right 10/10.

And the following phrase （オレが仕込んでやったこのおまんこでよ）is a clear continuation to what he was saying in the last text box..... which translates to "...with this pussy I properly trained" which again you somehow got "Because I've felt every inch of you"...........Ummmmmmm.......wut?

I'll go back to larping the day you go back and learn how to properly read and write my language before you make a fool of yourself again.

By the way if you did your research like you should have when even trying to do this TL you would realise that other TL ain't mine bud. You may wanna recheck whether the parts I just tore your "TL" apart are the same as the other one :) "one difference" yikes.....

Last edited on 06 April 2020, 23:20.

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Update: Nagare Ippon will not be on the 2020-06 Comic Aun issue despite being on the artist preview list. However, he is now present again on the preview list for Comic Aun 2020-08.

https://files.catbox.moe/93tub0.jpg

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