my first attempt, no clean, spare me...

08貝多芬....

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This is part 1 right? https://e-hentai.org/g/664200/d5ab56fb05/

Base +7, jdog1234 +7, Leo William +6

Gah, I hate these "It was all a dream! Just kidding! :D" scenarios, such a huge turn-off...

Base +6, Washma Butt +9, Leo William +6, MrSquigglesIAm +6, Shinryu-Rex +11

This author does absolutely amazing artwork and stories, but then he never wants the girl to truly be fucked, or it lasts for like 1 panel.

The amount of teases to her being gangbanged too etc.

We're being NTR'd by the Author himself at this point

Also she apparently has a brother based on one of the stories... this go's nowhere.

Last edited on 30 May 2020, 05:20.

Base +7, jdog1234 -7, RobeAndWizardHat -5, KJaguar -6, Marisa Kirisame -8, WindyAtmosphere -7, VictoryRush -6, Stanfield -6, covs -6

I think not being found is success. If the identity is exposed, it's failure. If the girl is fucked, it's the biggest failure. When I watch this kind of cartoon, what I enjoy is a little bit of the thrill and guilt of being found, but it shouldn't cross that line. In fact, I have designed some tasks. Girls who are interested can contact my email: 1992131347@qq.com

Base +4, Kevadu +6, KJaguar -6, Leo William +6, K_Gattuso -1

Nice work! By the way, does anyone have with ice skater one?

Base +6

Very nice a full color exhibitionism manga. Thanks for translating.

Base +12, Leo William +6

Page 7: "haven't reach" -> "haven't reached"
Page 8: "is trully" -> "does truly"
Page 13: "on the building" -> "in the building"
Page 15 "have to done" -> "have to do"
Page 24 "it hurt's" -> "it hurts"
Page 30 "trully" -> "truly"
Page 42 "isn't her nipple become" -> "hasn't her nipple become" and "something come out" "something came out"
Page 49 "you're finally got caught" -> "you finally got caught"

Also, all the "I" are lower case instead of upper case. Had you used a proper comic font like Wild Words it would be barely noticeable, but with an Arial-like one it's kinda.jarring.

Finally, text in bubbles should be centered (and if you don't have the option in the program you're using, it is the wrong tool for the job).

Base +24, Leo William +6, tjabacka +9, tehpwnerer +6, m42a +16, Shinryu-Rex +11

ahh, thx for the input, well it is a beginner lv translation...and i'm not a native speaker..
i'll try to be more cautious for the next one

Base +1, Leo William +6

Nice nice nice nice nice nice

Base +6, Leo William +6

@Tomoya Okazaki WTF are you talking about?

Exhibitionism is at its greatest when there is no penetration.

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