left-aligned text is a no-no in any manga.

Base +17, sleazeball +1, yoshi245 +7

What @ncc1701z said. Also, my advice is choosing somewhere else for getting your raws; apart from those evil filenames that create issues with sorting, the site you're using now (NH perhaps?) is giving you the okay-quality 1280x version scraped from here (intended only for viewing, definitely not for working on). When you see errors "File X has been replaced" when uploading your translation, it means that the original raw was from this very site (this gallery, in fact, that is 2000x3000 and not 1280x1800 like your version).

Base +24, yoshi245 +7

"If I pull that out, will you die?"
"It would be extremely painful."
"You're a big guy."
"For you."
That's all I could think on page 20. Baneposting is immortal.

Base +9, Grimmomega +6, Naturally +15, jackfell +5, kitsunefox21 +6, MSTallgeese -5, Dooderz +8

thats a very brave man putting anything in entoma's mouth

Base +6, Encuilion +9, ghostvortex100 +6, Tenshi Okihana +6

Imagine not knowing the source material and wondering why entoma's face never changes

Base +6, ghostvortex100 +6, Vensuu -6, Dooderz +8, neo_skyline +18, Tenshi Okihana +6

Art 7. Plot 7. Sexiness 8. Translation 4. True to character 6. All out of 10.

Base +8, Renalo -9, Ahzek_Ahriman -9, Vensuu -6, Dooderz -8, neo_skyline -19

who is the artist?

Base +7, patate-douce +3