The artist can clearly do better, as evidenced by the credit page and the art of the follow up doujin. They just seemed to not want to and released this doujin in a clearly unfinished state. Though even cleaning the lines wouldn't have helped some of those inconsistent and horribly misshapen dick shots.
Art 2. Plot 3. Sexiness 4. Translation 4. True to character 4. All out of 10.
Those 2 pages with the main character look so different from the rest of the doujin... is it traced? Or just a rushed doujin? Considering the come out of nowhere and not at the start of end of it I have no idea. The rest of this work is low quality but bearable to read. Sadly it's a do nothing work. No blackmail, no dark magic, no big dick powers, no hypnosis, the guy just fucks her and she does absolutely nothing it's just ridiculous. It's so bland the lack of spiciness can be feel every page with action.
Honestly this doujin reflects the quality of the show for the lack of a better way to describe it lol.