On page 2 in the last box after the comma should be a pronoun, probably "we".
On page 6 in the first box before "middle of sex" should be "in". Also, the first part of that box is in present tense, so the second part should be the same, something like "when I least expect it...".

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@Siperi Thanks for finding all these mistakes. I kind of rushed these at the end and I guess I didn't proofread very well. Also I've been spelling "embarrassing" wrong for some time, it would seem. I've fixed all the errors you pointed out.

Last edited on 14 August 2020, 08:38.

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Thou shalt not murder?

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@Edax
Yeah he totally killed that pussy

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Coincidentally I found the original 1 hour after it released. 20 months later turned out it got updated in just few hours... just like https://e-hentai.org/g/1707317/b1ebbaf064/
updated as uick again

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1
https://www.pixiv.net/en/artworks/82537787
https://fantia.jp/posts/389254
🟢 RAW: https://e-hentai.org/g/2161548/af8b8c3228/
🟢 ENG: https://e-hentai.org/g/1707399/b21f790807/ 🔵 You are here

2
https://www.pixiv.net/en/artworks/86530348
https://fantia.jp/posts/556496
🟢 RAW: https://e-hentai.org/g/1858613/2270b5d98e/
🟢 ENG [animefan71109]: https://e-hentai.org/g/1857042/21449ffa52/
🟢 ENG [Erozbischof]: https://e-hentai.org/g/1859334/7d0891218c/

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