This is very Nito.

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Could use some help with spelling and such. Maybe record instead of take, pharaoh instead of pharoah and stuff like that. Quite a few clumsy sentences and such. Better than nothing, but not the cream of the crop either.

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Don't even bother danielwain, Squiggles is a horrible translator and will never improve.

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Every beginner's course to translation should have a picture of the top panel on page 7 accompanied by a description of what actually happens in the doujin, as an example of how a small error can radically change the meaning of a sentence.

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Rough grammar
p4 brown skin -> brown skinned
hygienic skin -> lighter skin (?)
p5 Pharoah -> Pharaohs
to stop her -> stopping her
p6 pharoah -> pharaoh
still a lot -> still got a lot
called orgasm -> called an orgasm
p7 tasted orgasm -> tasted an orgasm
would make -> should make
much of a -> much
p8 pharoah -> pharaoh
pharoah nitrocris -> pharaoh nitrocris
p9 start taking -> action
p11 taking -> recording

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