Tried to correct at least the most egregious grammar errors and typos, while keeping the original meaning. I actually don't think it was that bad, except for a few errors that marred the rest of the work. Let me know your thoughts, please.

i liked it, good job-!

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Te grammar corrections are good, but if I may criticize - the typesetting is pretty bad.
You should avoid filling the speech balloons so tightly and getting this close to the edges (see: page 1), it makes it more unpleasant to read. Also try to conform to the shape of the balloon more, so that the lines in the middle are wider, and the ones on top and bottom are narrower. I would also generally decrease the spacing between the lines, so the text is more tightly packed.
Good job overall, though.

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Put a bun in the oven.

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great work, I hope you can do the rest

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