Decensored by Belldandy100
https://e-hentai.org/g/1453326/8f4cad5e0f/

translated by Sn0wCrack
https://e-hentai.org/g/934840/8ae328090d/

Need sequel Satsuki x Ryuuko

Base +6, blabbo +6, avrelivs +6, shuntensatsu +15, damnspams +7, Z_xiao +6, Hyoros -16

Page 5: becase

Page 7: expresion

Page 8: wraping

Page 12: redy

Page 12: "won't let get of my dick"

Base +7, Inspiretonic +6, Chaosrains +7, McMac91 +7, aaron_ +11, damnspams +7, Rockington +9, kishudark +6

Page 9: "you're your"
Page 10: "what would else should I"
Page 15: "possion"

Base +6, Inspiretonic +6, Chaosrains +7, McMac91 +7, damnspams +7

Tagged "poor grammar" because 8 errors in 18 pages is nearly 2x the required proportion for the tag (10 in 40)

Base +25, Inspiretonic +6, Chaosrains +7, JohnyXD +11, Eyriol +7, damnspams +7, Damoriel +6, Rockington +9, Hyoros +16, Dracul IV +6, kishudark +6

Imagine if bad grammar was a fetish

Base +6, Chaosrains +7, Evyy +14, fectylf-panda +5, i see god +6, Dracul IV +6, kishudark +6

Well I liked it! Especially the guy getting strung up at the end.

Also, if you are new at this, don't worry about poor grammar. I mean, improve, but you're doing good just translating.

Base +9, Chaosrains -7, shuntensatsu +15, Evyy +14, wonderbread08 +6, somercet +12, kishudark +6

Normally I don't give a shit but the English text is quite bad, could use an editor for sure.

Base +3

Rough grammar
p5: becase -> because
obessed -> obsessed
p6: shoudln't -> shouldn't
p7: expresion -> expression
and now then -> now then
p8: to much -> too much
p9: you're your -> your
p10: what would else -> what else
Junketstu -> Junketsu
p11: onto -> on to
p12: let get -> let go

Bounty for a (new) English TL https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=23517

Last edited on 21 October 2022, 23:20.

Base +42, Glovelove. +19, kishudark +6