Native english? not translated from other language?
p.24 It should be "I only remember that semen wouldn't came out even if they kept squeezing it out..." instead of "I only remember that semen came out even if they kept squeezing it out..." cause "I only remember that semen came out even if they kept squeezing it out..." = he could still create semen whenever they squeezing him, which is nothing to talk about.
But, people "go" in Japanese but in English they "come" .
So, mistranslation on p12, p13, etc.
Curiously, it's correct on p20.
Also p13 "I wasnt be like this" ought to be "I wasn't like this"; "Are you have a fetish" should be "Do you have a fetish", p20 "Chew" isn't a kssing sound but what you do on a piece of food.
From what I understand, Mackgee used to have a professional translator working for him until said translator quit. So now his english works are machine translated instead.