This is a translation of a work that we really love!

Other translation of the same work: https://e-hentai.org/g/1850088/9d0c686900/

If you decide to continue translating/editing stuff, I can recommend you to not use left aligned text... Centered text is far better.
Another things that you can improve is "fonts". You first need to find a more suitable font. If you want, you can also find several fonts (one for normal text / one when the character is horny / getting fucked... etc = possible to play with different fonts).

And lastly another thing I can recommend you to do, is to check the raw. I'm saying this due to your last page, the "Must be Spanish or French to be Translated to English"...
You see, I already translated things French => Eng & Spanish => Eng. in the past. I can tell you that, if you truly want to use a Spanish/French/...etc... translation, you should only based yourself on it. Sometimes the translation that you're using, will be a little bit inaccurate or even completely incorrect (depends on the translator). If the translation is a bit inaccurate, checking the raw will allow you to detect errors & rectify them. (But, of course, you need to be able to understand a little bit of japanese and/or to know some people that can help you check things)

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Condoms ruin everything that is good.

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The note at the end was in spanish....

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I liked this ending even more than the usual ones where the girl leaves and he never sees her again type..

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There's gotta be a tag for things translated like this. A translation of a translation using that translations scans? Low quality work

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