So I only looked at the raw of page 23 and 24.

Pg. 23:

こんなの
はしたないって
わかってるんですが
"I didn't want to do this to begin with..."
> I know it's shameful for me to say this but..."

私まだココが
疼くんです
"I knew it was going to hurt afterwards, but..."
> This place is aching again.

Pg. 24:

じゃあ よろしくね
Well then, let us get this starting... --> "started"
> Well then, we'll be in your care.

そういえば
一年生のとこに
教育実習生の人
来たの知ってろ?
Hey! Are you a freshman!?
> By the way, did you hear about the first year's new trainee teacher?

知ってるわよ
男でしよ!
I know the relations you have with that man!
> I know! It's a man!

オ!ト!コ!
The teacher!
> "It's! A! Man!" or "M! A! N!"

Last edited on 08 June 2021, 07:25.

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RAW: https://e-hentai.org/s/a6e4fc7d3b/1900183-28

As Hinagiku Katsura posted above, your translation for the two sample pages he mentioned is very different from what is shown in the raws.

If the same holds true for the other pages of this chapter, then that would make this more of a rewrite than an actual translation.

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Text is left out on p.2, and other pages are all over the place just like p.23-24.

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chapter 3 and 4 pleaseee

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