I think this is my first Trap/Yaoi doujins I get to work and release on EH. I did one previously with Astolfo but it was more Male/Female with Astolfo Dom'ing on Jeanne and there is another that's on Full Color but I didn't work on it directly and was asked by staff to upload it myself on behalf of the team. But in this one, I can directly give you all a direct edited work from me about our beloved Rider and his Master having fun together. Didn't think Astolfo liked to get THAT kinky in the end though.

EDIT: Cleaning up a Branding issue.

Anyways, thanks for reading and fapping. Kindly do leave your thoughts and reviews, if possible. Also, make sure to support the official release of your favorite Ero Mangaka whenever possible, alright? Have a great day guys!

Editor: God Revan
Translator: Samid
Raw: https://e-hentai.org/g/1591807/3105530794/
D-Moe Version: https://doujins.com/fate-grand-order/puyocha-my-reasoning-isn-t-disappearing-53906

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Nice debut title and congrats.

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Damn there's something really hot about the concept of a anal bead-sling bikini, especially if it's on a cute boy like Astolfo.

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This is such a glass of refreshing water. A new astolfo piece where he isn’t the top or being straight. I get Astolfo is a pussy slayer in lore. But the appeal of traps is wanting to fuck them up the ass.

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on a meta level I love that astolfo made so many artists awaken to traps and femboys when they were originally just trying to cash in on the popularity

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RAW: https://e-hentai.org/g/1591807/3105530794/

KOR CHN ESP

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Nice hentai, nice translation. It's always nice to see artists focused on straight hentai trying something different. Astolfo gets a lot of hate for being a "draw a girl and call it a boy" character, but a more approachable character for people used to females can do a lot of good, as seen in this creation. Here's hoping that this is the first of many for this artist.

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Haha his cum is in the shape of a heart

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Couple of notes...

Bottom-left, page 1, there's no 'kiss' there at all. Master is calling him "Astolfo-kyun," which is a cutesy version of "Astolfo-kun."

Page 2, the first panel is all Master no Astolfo; It's supposed to be, "Mm! ...Hmm? This is...!" He's surprised by the taste of chocolate being in the kiss. While the bit about the apron is close, it's more correctly, "It's obvious to wear an apron to keep your clothes clean!"

Page 6, last two bubbles, top is Astolfo saying, "I can't take any more...!" or "I'm on the edge!" followed by Master saying, "Astolfo, me too...!"

Page 7, top-left bubble isn't cleaned properly and has the JP font bleeding through. It's also incorrect; it's Astolfo saying "I'm cumminggggg~!" in a slack-jawed way. Specifically he uses the version of 'cum' that refers to something coming out of the body rather than the concept of an orgasm, which is a reference not only to ejaculation but also the pearls being forced out of his ass, so it would even be best to go with "Ish cumming ouuuuut!!" or similar.

Still page 7, "This isn't enough" is wrong because it sounds like Astolfo is referring to himself, when in fact what he said was commentary on Master. "You're not satisfied with just that, right?" followed by "You're still so full of energy." Now, the next part is actually really tricky, so I'm not surprised at all you got it wrong. Astolfo follows this up with "Sate! Ko-u-ka-n shichao~" which, if written literally, would be "So then, let's get-to-the-fucking!" But it's actually a double entendre; he uses 'genki' to refer to Master's hard-on, and while normally it would be better to just say "You're still so hard," in this case the following line being in hiragana allows a double meaning where using 'energy' is actually best. The first meaning for こうかん, 肛姦, is 'anal sex'. But the second meaning, 交換, would in Fate refer to 体液交換, or as the English-language Fate community prefers, "mana transfer." So it's both. Thus, a better translation would be, "Cram your mana right-in-to-here~!"

Page 8, bottom-right bubble, Astolfo pulls a title drop, but you ignore it despite having translated the title for this book into English. Keep the title drop.

Page 9, use "fuck" instead of "rape" for 'okasu'. Can't rape the willing. ;)

Page 11, Astolfo actually says, "Well then, let's head out of Chaldea and do it again!" He's not suggesting they fuck again at some future time, he's suggesting that they leave Chaldea -right now- and do it again. Also, in the afterword, the author yet again does a title drop (これは理性蒸発ではない) and yet again, despite having translated the title into English, you ignore the title drop here as well. You also misspell "interaction." The line after that misspelling is also wrong, and should be, "Believing in that wholeheartedly is how I'm able to create a good story." And finally, it's best to say "in" in the next book, not "on" the next book.

Whew. So anyway, yeah. Maybe find a QC for yourself so stuff like this doesn't slip through the cracks next time. Peace!

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I appreciate the points and will check them at a later date when I get some free time. I will also pass this to my Senior Translator so that he can also verify himself.

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