Original : https://e-hentai.org/g/1830719/b58c7f1464/

I edited this translation --> https://e-hentai.org/g/1803945/3e204bbcd4/ into the forementioned original gallery.

Scanned by : Super Shanko
Translated by : caramid

Pretty new to this, any advice is welcome.

While I do appreciate that you've given us a version of this doujin that's been typeset better than the other English translated version, the pages in the gallery you've used as the raw (https://e-hentai.org/g/1830719/b58c7f1464/) have noticeable portions of the top, bottom, left, and right of the page cut off when you compare it to the pages in this gallery (https://e-hentai.org/g/1775515/9ddb0b9da3/)

My understanding is that the gallery you've used as the raw is a paper scan done by someone and the other gallery is a digital.

I don't have any advice to give on whether you should replace this gallery with a new one that's been typeset using the digital as the raws or not, or whether it should even be replaced. This comment is just me letting you know that the raw you've used is a paper scan that appears to have been scanned somewhat poorly when compared to the digital raws.

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>TerminusRex
... Damn, I messed up. I just picked the raw with the biggest file size assuming it would be best. But it turns out it doesn't work like that. As you said, there's huge portions missing.

I'll keep that in mind from now on.

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Thank you for the translation @faresryan. Been waiting for this one. If possible, paste your translation into the digital one please :)

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I love the first part of this doujin, the sudden rape and mindbreak it was awesome.

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Yeah, I was thinking about doing what you did (using the existing translation with non-retarded typesetting), and I noticed there's nothing special about the larger gallery, it was just a paper scan at absurd, unnecessarily high resolution. Not a huge deal that you used this one though, there wasn't too much lost in the margins.

In the future, the three main criteria you should use for selecting a raw are:
Quality (Similar in this case, the paper scan is just at unnecessary resolution),
Censoring (The same in this case, but often digital raws have more censoring) and
Margins (digital raws almost always show the full image, paper scans can often cut off the margins).

Two pieces of unsolicited advice for typesetting:

1: The text doesn't have to be quite so big. If you look at the raw, the text often covers less than half of the text box. If using a smaller font lets your center your text better, or keep things in the text box better, it's not a bad idea.

2: It's usually better to avoid combining text in conjoined text bubbles, as you did on page 11. It's not the end of the world, but the result generally looks worse than if you made two seperate boxes. This would be easier to do if you shrunk the text as per point 1.

Overall though, it's a massive improvement to the initial abomination of typesetting, so thank you for your efforts. If you're interesting in improving at typesetting, I highly recommend the following guide that I was suggested when I was just starting out: https://www.insidescanlation.com/etc/the-idiots-guide-to-editing-manga/guide/main

Last edited on 12 August 2021, 00:04.

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