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[Tsukumo Nikyu] Aikyou | Love for One's Hometown (COMIC Anthurium 2021-08) [English] [Cilok Ayam] [Digital]

[九十九弐級] 愛郷 (COMIC アンスリウム 2021年8月号) [英訳] [DL版]

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Posted:2021-10-09 14:36
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Language:English  TR
File Size:36.24 MiB
Length:23 pages
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Posted on 09 October 2021, 14:36 by:   Cilok Ayam    PM
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Raw: https://e-hentai.org/s/29aa927f8b/1970125-364
Translation: Cilok Ayam
Contact: cilokayam000@gmail.com
Posted on 09 October 2021, 15:43 by:   Fate Averruncus    PM
Score +365
Jesus mate. Do you not QC or something? Typos and grammatical errors galore.
Posted on 09 October 2021, 23:54 by:   AIDSFART2011    PM
Score +22
I've seen worse grammar, it's decent at least. A quick 15mins QC will remove most of the errors like wrong tenses and missing "a" and "the"s. I hope you keep at it and maybe upload a version2 of this.
Posted on 10 October 2021, 02:15 by:   meow_pao    PM
Score +215
Here's a list of corrections for the first half of this work that you may want to consider using, in case you plan on updating this gallery:

P01
"The 20:05 train will arrive at Line 2", not "in Line 2".
Depending on what the raw says, it should be "The document on Ichinoe-san is ready" or "The document is already with Ichinoe-san".

P02
"I just got a new job, received some training" or "I just got a new job. I'm getting some training", not "I just get a new job, getting some training".
"When I come back here", not "When I'm going back here".

P03
"Busy", not "bussy". Trust me, you don't want to know what "bussy" means.
"Tomorrow", not "Tommorow".
"Don't you think you've had enough", not "you have enough".

P04
"Why do I always get scolded", not "Why am I always get scolded". BUT, she's drunk, so she may be screwing up her words by accident, so it might be acceptable.
"He's always nagging me" or "He always nags me", not "He always nagging me". Again, this might be because she's drunk.
"Why is nothing good happening to me" or "Why does nothing good happen to me", not "Why is nothing good happened to me". The drunk condition still applies here.

P06
"Your boobs, they're really big", not "it's really big".
"That's because you're pressing on it", not "That's because you push it".
"Do you want to touch them", not "touch it". I'm assuming her boobs are the ones being referred to here; if it's his dick, then "touch it" is OK.

P07
"They're so big", not "It's so big".

P08
"How are they", not "How is it".
"My ex has done it" or "I've done it with my ex" or "I've given one to my ex", not "My ex have done it".

P09
"We've already come this far" or "We've already gone this far", not "We already come this far".

P11
"You already came", not "You already cum".

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