This was pretty hot and in character.

Base +7, Slobber +29, Lordofclits +10

This is perfect, except haruhi looks a little weird.

Base +3

DAMN YOU CGRASCAL! You almost ruined a perfectly beautiful doujin with your dumpster diving shitty english. I love this author. The story and artwork are simple, light hearted and beautiful. The characters are very true to themselves and you root for them. (Despite the weird voice I heard Tamaki's voice in my head reading his lines because of CGRASCAL's horrendous translation.) I really do recommend this doujin. But I had to stop and almost put it down twice at the beginning because the translation was just so bad. Still, towards the end the characters and story won out and I enjoyed it true to the original artists' wishes.

Art 8. Plot 9. Translation 2. True to character 8. All out of 10.

Base +7, Alipelle +7, Mochita -6