RAW: https://e-hentai.org/s/f31301c66b/1804880-25

Yuru camp, but lewder

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Fucking InTents.

(go on, you know someone was going to make that quip)

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This really went from 'cute camping story' to 'fucking intense'. Excellent.

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Really cute girl-meets-boy story, and the sex scenes are great. Thanks for sharing this!

Incidentally, there's quite a number of minor grammatical errors on the first few pages alone. You may want your proofreader to go over his work again.

P01
"At a loss", not "at a lost".
"I met her by chance", not "I met her by a chance".
"I'm getting some advice", not "I'm getting some advices"
"Set up my tent", not "build my tent" (to match with the terms used in Page 3).

P02
"This is what they used to light the fire", not "lit the fire".
"Burn for a long time", not "burns for a long time".

P03
"Could you please have dinner with me" or "Could you please have a meal with me", not "Could you please have a dinner with me".
"You've spent so much time teaching me that you've run out of time", not "You spent a lot of time teaching me that you've run out of time".

P04
"Why did you start camping in the first place", not "on the first place".

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uuuooohhh ponytail erotic!!! exposed nape and ears erotic!!!!

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Happy there is a translation 😃
Sees who translated it 🤦‍♂️

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Took a quick look and some spots seem to be incorrectly translated as well. For example, in pg. 5, they were not saying camping was surprisingly popular, but rather the girl was wondering if camping would help make her popular and the guy was saying it was surprising (to hear her say that) considering she looked like someone who would be very popular. That would make more sense with the dialogue right after that where she explained that she's taller than the boys etc etc.
And some of the minor errors someone already pointed out above.

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