Her eyes are clear in the beginning but when she thinks of her shattered dreams of being an athlete they get murky and she wants sex to forget it. A sad note to end the story on.

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10 mistakes for rough translation.

Page 2
Your TL: I thought everyone went to the public pool today?
JP text: 今日はみんな市民プールで練習じゃなかった？
Author intent: She's asking if he (and the rest) weren't supposed to PRACTICE at the public pool, not if they just went.

Page 2
Your TL: I understand that you can't go out like that, but...
JP text: 総体に出られなくて残念なのはわかりますけど・・・
Author intent: He's saying he understands that she's disappointed that she can't participate with everyone else. You're just implying he understand she can't go because she's hurt.

Page 3
Your TL: What's done is done!
JP text: そんなときゃそんな時だって！
Author intent: She's referring to future events, not past. "I'll worry about that when it happens!"

Page 3
Your TL: I can't swim normally anymore!
JP text: どうせもう二度とまともには泳げないんだし
Author intent: You're completely changing the tone of the sentence, mostly because you mistranslated the previous line. She's basically saying "bah, who cares! i'll never be able to swim like I used to anyway!" All that "whatever, I'm done with life" self-destructive behavior is lost in your TL.

Page 7
Your TL: can't be helped huh... you're really...
JP text: だめですっ・・・こんな
Author intent: You mixed up voices. Dude is talking. Also, wrong TL.

Page 7
Your TL: ...
JP text: うぁあっ・・・
Author intent: Omitted text. These are moans that you cleaned the bubble for.

Page 7
Your TL: Been forcing me to have sex with her.
JP text: こんな風に僕とセックスをする
Author intent: There's no forcing anywhere. "we've been having sex in this fashion/like so"

Page 13
Your TL: ...
JP text: やぁっ
Author intent: Omitted text. These are moans that you cleaned the bubble for.

Page 14
Your TL: remember what I've taught you before
JP text: 前教えたみたいに・・・
Author intent: She's not asking him to remember anything. She's telling him to do it just like she taught him.

Page 16
Your TL: As if she's lashing out blindly...
JP: 八つ当たりみたいに
Author intent: You used the wrong expression. This doesn't mean to "lash out blindly" like some crazed, violent drunkard, but rather "to vent her frustrations". It's not lashing out, and it's certainly not blind.

Page 17
Your TL: kuha...
JP text: えっぐっあぁっ
Author intent: えっぐ = 刳い = slang for awesome/incredible.

Page 18
Your text: My head is tingling. Aaaah.
JP text: 頭ちかちかするっ・・・あはぁっっ
Author intent: ちかちか doesn't mean to tingle. Heads don't tingle. She's saying that her mind is flickering. It's a metaphor.

Page 19
Your text: ...
JP text: はぁっ
Author intent: Omitted text. These are moans/sighs that you cleaned the bubble for.

Last edited on 30 January 2022, 18:57.

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that nissan gtr pp edition hits me hard lmao

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一句一句自己翻译，看到最后一p女主没穿内裤绷不住了，这不会又要和男主在海边来一炮吧。前面那个看海的画面很棒

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Very sad in tone. She only uses sex to stop him from talking about the problems that she doesn't want to face.

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啥时候有中文翻译？

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