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Not everyday you get Pokemon Mystery Dungeon story like that. Nice work.

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Well done. This deserves a sequel.

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The salazzle is a feminine looking male called Ryme.

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Ryme - Ryme is the last, but biggest of my pokemon OC's that I have. Ryme is a male salazzle that, thanks to much of his parents help, managed to evolve, but due to the amount of time without them, regressed and caused a deformed and unfinished evolution. Despite being male, Ryme is typically referred to using female pronouns in most cases. Ryme is an assassin in name, but mostly focuses on spy and thief work, rather than actual assassinations. This is due much in part to her simply being bad at them, but also that she's much better at the former by comparison. Ryme is a member of a criminal organization that simply refer to themselves as the frost demons. After a very long and unwanted past, Ryme eventually seeks to join the group in order to get revenge on exploration teams as a whole for killing her parents as part of a mission long ago. After joining them, she is put under the garchomp Zylo's command, working under him, before being assigned to Hippil.

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I'm just going to ignore the whole oc thing. Ryme is a Salazzle and is obviously just normally female because that is all a Salazzle can be and it obviously can't be trans because that's stupid.

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that was pretty fun!

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@Drako1209
I love this. While the plot itself needed a bit more work to flow better, I enjoyed the scenes and art, very well done in this regard. I do find it odd that "Ryme" is male, I know its it involves fictional characters and magical creatures like pokemon, but it still feels like quite a bit of rules had to be bent just for salazzle to be male, feels pretty forced tbh. Salazzle only evolves from female salandit, and currently male salandit can't evolve at all. I can see something like this working for the gardevoir line, since gardevoirs can be male or female.

While I do find a male salazzle strange, I am glad this story doesn't shove the fact in your face while reading it. I honestly couldn't care less if salazzle is trans or w/e, as long as she looked like how a salazzle is supposed to look like; ie feminine and sexy, with presumably female genitals.

Art 9/10.
Character clothing designs are excellent, not too much clothing not too little. I like that the anatomy was close to the original, very glad salazzle didn't have have gigantic tits. Also happy story didn't include the typical hyper buff bipedal pokemon, like a lucario with Arnold Schwarzenegger's body.

Story 7/10.
I really like the premise of salazzle being punished for her crimes, I enjoyed the fight. Sex scenes were WAY too short. Plot wise, I felt that I needed prior knowledge of the world to have the best grasp on what's happening. Doujin could have been a good 10 pages longer. Overall I can tell a lot of thought was put into this.

Characters 8/10.
Characters were great except for cyndaquil, guy is annoying. One moment he's a do-gooder and law abiding pokemon; the next he is a rapist.

Enjoyability 8/10
Overall I really enjoyed this story and am glad to have been introduced to your character. Pokemon bondage is hot. Thank you for commissioning and sharing this piece.

Is this the end or will there be more? With how the story ended it seems that she would be captured and then punished even harder for breaking out of her prison.

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