Original: https://e-hentai.org/g/2087584/48f97e6c64/
Chinese: https://e-hentai.org/g/2086540/ecad3519f3/
Spanish: https://e-hentai.org/g/2197697/364ed59dc2/

1. You used the downsized version of the images. Download the archive, download the non-downsized torrent, or click the image, scroll down, and click "Download original".
2. Make sure to level your pages. I know you used the Spanish version (and maybe translated from Spanish into English, which is an entire other story in itself.) Just use the originals. They're already leveled.
3. Punctuate (periods, commas).

Here's some guides:

General: https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/
Typesetting: https://web.archive.org/web/20190406011154/https://fallensyndicate.wordpress.com/typesetting-tutorial/
Redrawing: https://web.archive.org/web/20150421210157/http://www.redhawkscans.com/showthread.php?7057-Rain-s-Redraw-Tutorials
Basic cleaning: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PANrCwHy630

Base +16, neo_skyline +19, as102 +12, Lao Shan Long +7, czerkill +10, TheOldDeus +7, cynamonbunz +37, Shimeru +6

holy crap those are some long ass arms

Base +12, Baka_no_Ou +6

"holy crap those are some long ass arms" - Better to grope your ass with OwO

Base +8, Novanity +6, AriesWarlock +15, Baka_no_Ou +6, 151132 +8

In addition to the stuff cutegyaru mentioned, a note on grammar: it seems you have trouble with irregular verbs like 'setted' -> 'set', 'growed' -> 'grew'. I wish I could give you a simple rule to consistently determine which English verbs use the regular '-ed' ending and which don't, but unfortunately there isn't one; it's just one of those things you have to memorise. Perhaps you could look up a few that you know you're likely to use and start by remembering those?

That being said, your English is perfectly understandable. Just make sure you punctuate consistently (i.e. make sure to put a full stop at the end of every sentence that doesn't have a ? or !, including at the end of a speech bubble) and you should be fine. I hope to see more from you in future. :)

Base +6, Lao Shan Long +7, Revinness +6, bigmak +6