What up! Thanks to Cutegyaru for the helpful resources.

I'm glad it's been helpful, but still a few things:

1. Punctuate. This means putting periods at the end of your sentences.
2. Some of your fonts are borderline unreadable. I know the temptation is very strong to "adapt" the font to the speech, but this is a noob mistake. You're starting out, so stick to a single dialogue font, a narration font, and then a font or two for your moans/SFX. Suggestions: Wild Words, CCVictorySpeech, Spinner Rack BB for dialogue/narration.
3. Don't fucking put memes in your pages. Looking at the last one here. Make a credit page and put the memes there.
4. Some of your text is not center aligned. Watch out for that.

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Oh my gosh.

This art style is gorgeous. Exactly the kind of stuff I wish I saw more of now.

I'm not going to critique the scanlation effort, because most of what I would have said is mentioned by 'cutegyaru' above, except to reiterate that the font choice was terrible.

One more font that works well: CC Astro City.

If you look, you might still be able to find AnonBlack's old typesetting guides from the group Futari Wa Pretty Anon (a scanlation group that worked on Monmusu Musume, Jitsu Wa Watashi Wa, and Bird Café). Those were good.

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AnonBlack's Typesetting Guide : https://mangadex.org/title/08e1f85a-bb12-4fe4-aec5-0d7a80b3a261/anonblack-s-typesetting-guide?tab=chapters
The Idiot's guide to editing manga: https://www.insidescanlation.com/etc/the-idiots-guide-to-editing-manga/guide/main

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Why the weird different fonts though ?

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This is the first time I've seen this artist go for this type of scene from recent memory. And I love how they are still 'battling' against evil. What a great scene and fitting for the type of girl the long black haired girl is. And to be walked in on...wonderful.

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