Raw from:
https://e-hentai.org/g/1338819/0171473c4d/
Buy the Thing:
https://www.melonbooks.co.jp/detail/detail.php?product_id=1175534

Please proofread. Also, I'm not gonna go through the entire TL, but some of it is inaccurate (minor omissions here and there, weird phrasing trying to 1:1 Japanese structures, etc.)

p.9 your sperm are stuck => is
p.9 on my hair => in
p.9 She's always been kind and doting on me => needs to be rephrased. been kind TO and doting ON
p.12 inviting => not related to grammar, but 誘い合う doesn't really mean "to invite"
p.12 did it felt
p.15 earlier, you're looking => you were
p.15 they're soft, smells good => ,and they smell good
p.15 aroused to my => by
p.16 as it melts => your narration tense is in the past. stick to it.
p.18 bosoms => bosom
p.18 it's sex like never before => missing words here.
p.19 i asked her what does she think about me => i asked her what she thinks of me

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@cutegyaru
Oof. Sorry.
Thank you.

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