This translation is a mess. It can't decide whether it wants to be written in first person ("I do stuff"), second person ("you do stuff", polite form), third person ("she does stuff"), or imperative ("do stuff, you!", polite form).

All corrections below assume that the third person perspective is correct.

[p1]
"Sie heizt Mr. Takeda." -> probably "Sie heißt Frau Takeda"; as written it would mean "she heats Mr. Takeda"
"vorbereitende Vorbereitung" -> "Vorbereitung"; as written it would mean "preparatory preparation"
"Sie ziehen [...] und gehen Sie" -> "Sie zieht [...] und geht"
"kommen Niemand weiß" -> "kommen, weiß niemand"

[p2]
"Sie [...] klettern, ziehen Sie Ihre" -> "sie [...] klettert, zieht sie ihre"
"ab rasiert" -> "abrasiert"
"Sie ausgezogen haben [...] Klebt [...] auf dem Mund" -> "sie ausgezogen hat [...] klebt [...] auf den Mund" (also, "Hose" should really be "Unterhose" or "Höschen"; we're talking about panties, not pants/trousers); as written, the beginning of this sentence would mean "She takes the pants that you have taken off in her mouth" in particularly bizarre mid-sentence switch of perspective
"jetzt kann Ich" -> "Jetzt kann sie"

[p3]
"Sie klettere [...] bereite dich [...] deinen" -> "Sie klettert [...] bereitet sich [...] ihren"; as written, not only does it switch from second to third person, it also uses indirect speech or subjunctive mood, neither of which makes sense here
"Sie Befestigen [...] am beider Hände und Füße" -> "Sie befestigt [...] an beiden Händen und Füßen"; I'm not sure what "Holzkragen" (wood collar) is meant to refer to

[p4]
"Wenn Sie [...] legen" -> "Als sie [...] legt"

[p6]
"Mein Arm" -> "Meine Arme"

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