I may have missed a couple of translations somewhere, sorry

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CHN: https://e-hentai.org/g/2313053/12600f053f/
KOR: https://e-hentai.org/g/2342253/3836975d47/
FRA: https://e-hentai.org/g/2298766/73e7aa714e/

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only read a little bit since idk vtuber stuff

005
OG: あ〜あ売れっ子はつれーな〜なんちゃって…
TL: "Ah! I should say stuff like it's annoying to be popular or something like that.."
ED: she's just thinking to herself about the troubles of being popular, not thinking about actually saying that

OG: スパチャえぐっｗ俺らにも回せよ〜
TL: "These superchats are so convenient!"
ED: missed detail about him wanting a cut of the superchats too

OG: あーういはノってねー時全然ダメなんだよ
TL: "I think Ui's getting tired of waiting"
ED: he's saying it sucks when she's not into it

007
OG: 「だろーがよっ」ってういの口グセじゃんｗ
TL: "Yeah, I've seen Ui in the log book"
ED: 口グセ not ログセ, he's repeating a phrase she says a lot

OG: そーいやそーだわｗ聴きすぎてうつっちまったかな
TL: "Oh, yeah I'm starting to feel bad listening to her"
ED: the gist is he picked it up from listening to her too much

OG: はいはい口もサボんないでー
TL: "Yeah yeah, shut up and keep using your mouth"
ED: he's telling her not to slack off. also you didn't typeset the grunts in the other bubbles

OG: マジメにやれよったくどんくせーなー
TL: "Seriously, you can't take it seriously can you?"
ED: he's telling her to be serious and then demeaning her

008
OG: 外の店でヤってっから興奮してんのか？ / まぁ俺もだけど…っ！
TL: "Are you really that excited down there?" / "Because I feel like you are!"
ED: he's asking if she's turned on because they're at a public place (karaoke) / "Because I am too"

OG: こんなやつらにっ…！
TL: N/A
ED: safe to say she's not fond of them

009
OG: とりあえず一発目…っ！
TL: "I'm cumming first!"
ED: he's just announcing the first cumshot (presumably the first of many)

012
OG: 先生ぇ～こういう時は助かる～って言うんすよ！
TL: "Sensei, I can get her some help at times like these"
ED: they're saying the teacher should say "bless you"

014
OG: 最っ低ぇ…っ
TL: "This is the lowest..."
ED: pretty literal TL, she's saying this sucks

015
OG: もうっ…早くイカせて終わらせてやる…！
TL: "My god, just cum already and get it over with"
ED: she's thinking to herself that she's gonna make them cum

OG: 考えてみたらクラスの女子に学校で抜いてもらうとか完全そっちだよなｗ
TL: "Come to think of it, she should've made excuses to bail us outta class long time ago"
ED: he's talking about how awesome it is to have a female classmate get them off

017
OG: ぅわぁっ生ばかがよぉだっ…！
TL: "Uwaah..but I'm already raw inside you idiot..."
ED: wrong speaker

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I never knew i missed so much, thank you

Base +5

Beyond the translation:

1. You used the wrong 1280x downsized version of the images. Download the archive or the non-downsized torrent (right side.)
2. Your typesetting needs a lot of work.

General resources: https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/
Typesetting: https://web.archive.org/web/20190406011154/https://fallensyndicate.wordpress.com/typesetting-tutorial/
Redrawing: https://web.archive.org/web/20150421210157/http://www.redhawkscans.com/showthread.php?7057-Rain-s-Redraw-Tutorials

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Noted, sorry for the rough start. This is my first time doing this.

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Everyone starts somewhere and willingness to take feedback and improve goes a long way. I hope you do a version 2 with fixes, but thanks for translating it in the first place.

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Shigure Ui R a p e

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