I translated it again to horn my English proficiency!

If you want to improve your English, at least have someone that speaks English proofread it for you.

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How the fuck do you "horn" your proficiency in English? Do you mean hone? Clearly it didn't work, you need a proof reader, son.

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You can improve your English without sharing this. Also translating from a language I doubt you know[JP] to another language, English, is not smart. You will not improve much if at all this way.

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If you're not fully fluent in the language you're translating to, you NEED a proofreader. This is super basic stuff.

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@Kyuume
That's why I post it, for recommendation

@Oriandu
that was a joke, for this book is "horny"

@tealsack
No, cross comparison of several languages is believed to be the best way to reach multilinguality

@OMJay
again, that's why I post it

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Was wondering why a Mizuryu Kei manga had only one star, now I see why

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You need to "horn" your typesetting too, bro.
 
Also, this one has already been uploaded twice. Pick another title, preferably from a small artist. Unless you're here to hear people get mad at you,

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To horn ??? Well, what a way to start... Also, this website is not meant to be your training ground you dingus...

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@adamaria
I think it's actually better if he picked this one or others which already been translated since the number one complaint of "rough grammar" tag is "thanks, now no one will want to work on this since you already did it (badly)"
this way at least he wouldn't harm the chance of something not getting translated properly

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@mcCo or he could study english privately and not attention whore with trash uploads on a vietnamese lewd images forum.

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It's understandable but the quality is really too low to be enjoyable. I am sorry for the translator but it's really too badly translated.

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