The original: https://e-hentai.org/g/2422185/9252018077/

A paizuri bothel sounds nice, though I wish there also would be a flat chested girl trying her best to do paizuri. These looks always so cute~

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1. You used the wrong 1280x downsized resolution. Download the archive or download the non-downsized torrent (right side).
2. There's a bunch of omitted text in there. Can't read handwritten text or what?
3. Use a white stroke when there's floating text.
4. Punctuate.
5. Most of the time, your text is way too big.

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thank you for the critique, I'm doing what I can to improve the quality of my translations

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Not trying to be a dick, but ocr mtl isn't really helping anyone. If you went through the effort of cleaning you might as well find a translator, it might be easier than you think.
I also don't know how you went through the entire doujin and still chose to translate 女子◯学生 as high school girl. Come on, JC(Joshi Chugakusei) is literally in the title...

Fapped anyway because yue is amazing.

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> I'm doing what I can to improve the quality of my translations

Your editing, you mean? Because the only way to improve your translation is by learning Japanese so unless you are, you don't get to say that.

Edit: OF FUCKING COURSE HE DISOWNED HIS TRASH. EVEN IF IT IS TRASH, OWN IT UP AND UPDATE THE GALLERY ONCE YOU'RE BETTER. SO MUCH FOR IMPROVING, SHITHEAD!

Last edited on 17 January 2023, 01:35.

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