If you find grammatical errors, spelling mistakes or non-colloquial English, and you want me to fix it, you may leave your comment below.
BTW, I just start workout, and i am going to initiate my first bulking cycle! Good luck to me!
My next work is coming soon but slowly, so be patient please!

what a beautiful duwang
chew

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Bro please.
You clearly didn't learn from last time.

1. Get a native English proofreader.
2. Pick a better font.
3. Center align your text.

Edit: Because you read right to left in manga and having left alignment makes it awful to read. Also, it just looks bad.
Spelling correctly is one thing, but punctuation also exists, except it doesn't here. That's why you need a native English proofreader.

Last edited on 06 January 2023, 15:51.

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For proofreading there are people that do it for free and also programs that are free. You can put it into online web apps for example.
The alignment is slightly off for most people it's very unusual. For example look on the 2nd page "Hey" is almost touching the border of the bubble.
Still it's not as bad as the guy said. Thank you for translating

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"I had someone who doesn't natively speak the language and clearly doesn't have anything close to native level English proofread my work, why are you saying it's bad?"
Why do people insist on translating to English instead of a language they actually speak?

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I mean... it's an upgrade over the MS Paint white boxes from previous gallery, but Kyuume pretty much summed it up...

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> I get an indian friend reading this and he say it was fine
Now I'm sure you're just trolling

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Should have read the comments first.
This is terrible. Not even a so bad it's endearing terrible. It's the "I want to break your fingers so you wont have a chance to do this ever again" terrible.

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General resources: https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/
Typesetting: https://web.archive.org/web/20190406011154/https://fallensyndicate.wordpress.com/typesetting-tutorial/
Redrawing: https://web.archive.org/web/20150421210157/http://www.redhawkscans.com/showthread.php?7057-Rain-s-Redraw-Tutorials
Basic cleaning: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PANrCwHy630

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your english sucks ass pal

go practice in private and stop subjecting this artist's works to your ineptitude in the english language

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*you're

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@molitar
>and I am sure he is doing a better job translating than you could!
Click on Daruna's profile.

@OP
It's noble that you want to practice your English, but this is probably the most ineffectual way to do so. Honestly, chatting in the comments like you're doing right now is unironically a better way to improve lol Translation isn't a beginner thing and requires a solid basis, especially when neither language is your first.

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To add to @cutegyaru's comment, I would say that not even all native English speakers are capable of translating / proofreading. You aren't going to magically improve your English by translating because you fundamentally do not understand where and what you are doing wrong.

And to answer your question, it's everything. Your sentences are extremely unnatural sounding and filled with errors.
If you're going to continue doing this, the least you can do is make it a bit more palatable by putting more effort into making your translation look good. You're way less likely to get berated if it's obvious that you tried in some way. Read through what @nikgtasa sent.

@molitar
I thought you were too far gone before but my god. You're actually beyond saving.
On top of having no eyes or standards, you have more than proved to me that you are in fact retarded.

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Oh, I see what you did there. Pretending to have poor English as a joke. Clever. Well played. I must admit, I was fooled for a moment. But no matter, it's all in good fun. And besides, we all have room to improve and learn new things, regardless of our current level of proficiency in any particular language.

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If that's the case, why not practice what you preach? For instance:

thanks

just saying, it is my 3rd year in university
ive been speaking and writing in english for essay, reading lots of journal, for a long time
i also watch american tv shows, movies and youtube videos without dubs or subs
i get perfect score in toefl, and i can communicate with my western english-speaking lab partners without any difficulty
even, many of my western friends asked me if i had lived in english-predominant area for long when in our first conversation
but i always feel my english is not colloquial enough, like, anyone may notice i am a user of english as second language if a conversation lasts long enough

that is why i choose to translate comics, for this form of literature is probably the most down-to-earth of all

Thanks.

Just saying, it is my 3rd year in university.
I've been speaking and writing in English for essays, reading lots of journals, for a long time.
I also watched American tv shows, movies and YouTube videos without dubs or subs.
I get perfect scores in toefl, and I can communicate with my western English-speaking lab partners without any difficulty.
Even many of my western friends asked me if i had lived in an English-predominant area for a long period when we had our first conversation.
But I always feel my English is not colloquial enough; like, anyone may notice i am a user of English as second language if a conversation lasts long enough.

That is why I chose to translate comics, for this form of literature is probably the most down-to-earth of all.

Alright guys, can you tell me the difference between the two quotes?

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keep up the good work!

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Is it fun showing off your stupidity and stubbornness?

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If you are so busy, I'd suggest stopping with these uploads and invest your time into something else that gives you actual validation and appreciation.
I don't mind if you continue uploading because that's just a name more on my list of excluded uploaders, just don't expect to appeal to the 5% of audience who would actually defend this.

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Well, it's an slight improvement over what you've started with. But this will probably lead to someone pushing out their own translation out of revenge

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Kyuume is 100% correct. Please stop ruining these works if you cannot do the bare minimum steps they provided.

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People on this site can be really rude to each other. In particular, people are very mean to translators who upload amateur-looking work. So I understand why you would brush off peoples' criticism. As a translator and a positive person, I feel a lot of sympathy for you.

This translation is really bad, though.

If you're learning English, you shouldn't translate things into English. Rather, you should translate English works into your native language. As a translator, it's essential that you have a strong grasp of the language you're translating into. You will not produce good work until you reach a near-fluent level. Translating into English is a bad way to learn English, because you won't be aware of all the mistakes you make. You can't learn from your own writing until you're already at a fluent level. At a minimum, you need a proofreader who has an extremely strong (native) grasp of English. Many native speakers do not have a very strong grasp of their language.

As far as editing goes: manga often uses sans-serif fonts in Japanese, but this looks bad in English. The reasons aren't worth getting into, but you should basically always use a comic book font for manga translations. Some popular options are CC Wild Words and Blambot Casual. Also, center align your text. Left-aligned text looks bad in dialogue bubbles, especially when reading right to left.

I admire your drive to translate, but I really think you should direct that effort towards something else. Right now, your output is barely better than machine translation (in fact, some machine translations are better than this). If you must translate, don't translate into English. Your command of the English language is nowhere near good enough to translate into English.

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The argument of "if it's so bad why don't you translate it yourself" is wrong because the people complaining aren't the ones uploading these trash translations. If any of us were to translate it, simply by virtue of having a single native English speaker doing the work, it would probably at least come out readable.

Translations like this one are honestly just as bad as MTL. It's not that it looks amateur that's the problem, it's that it's a bad translation, it's done poorly, and the people who upload them for some reason think they're doing God's work by continually uploading these, so no matter what they won't fucking stop.

It's really funny seeing ESLs arguing for the quality of an English translation against actual native English speakers though.

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@tealsack
I find this kind of cynicism to be deeply misguided. Most people do not learn anything from being berated, and even the few who do are still significantly sadder for it. If the choice is between hurting somebody and having to blacklist an uploader on ex, obviously you should choose the latter. At the end of the day, all they did was waste a few minutes of your time. Maybe you don't mind being antagonized, but I promise the vast majority of people do.

@guy with the username that's just numbers
It took like five minutes to write even my rambly-ass comment lol, translating a doujin competently takes hours even if you're lightning fast about it. I don't comment here much but sometimes it just feels like you wanna pull someone aside and tell them what they're doing wrong, you know? And even if they don't improve, whining about it is kinda cathartic.

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Can't believe I need to see this shit almost every day while you stumble your way through a half-baked work that will just be superseded by someone who isn't too proud to at the very least get a fucking proofreader, jesus christ.

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First yes some people do laugh at bad things. But more importantly, someone has to "visit" this to find out how bad it is, and mizuryu kei is a very popular artist people would like to see more of so of course they check it out when they see one of his works. That still counts as a visit even if they look at a page and realize the translation is awful.

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It's truly disheartening to see that despite the numerous negative comments, the gallery still receives a high number of visitors. It's a testament to the power of personal taste and how it varies from person to person. While some may not understand the appeal of "duwang-style" manga, for others it holds a special meaning, it speaks to them in a unique way. Just like some people enjoy 80's bad movies, the same way others enjoy "duwang-style" manga. It's important to remember that everyone has different preferences and interests, and it's not fair to judge them for it. However, it's also important to remember that having different taste does not mean that the quality of the content should be disregarded.

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ayyy new weekend new frontpage with dio braando on it hell yeah

keep it up buddy you'll earn the clout you so desperately crave some day. hell you might actually learn english while you're at it!

sincerely,
a legitimate translator

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Just because people come to look at the town's embarrassment doesn't mean they love him.

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Idk what you all complain about so much, i think what you can see today is fine.
Its not done perfectly, espically the formating but the english is good enough and even the edditing doesnt look that awefull.
This doesnt give me cancer when i read it, many other translations do.

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Somebody once told me the world is gonna roll me
I ain't the sharpest tool in the shed
She was looking kind of dumb with her finger and her thumb
In the shape of an "L" on her forehead

Well the updates start coming and they don't stop coming
and they don't stop coming
and they don't stop coming
and they don't stop coming

I sure admire your tenacity to continue while simultaneously improving absolutely nothing at all lmao.
Now that's a true sigma grindchad.

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Page 14: "vagina" is misspelled as "vigina" and you've could have done an better job with the typesetting.

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There is a point where we needed to stop and we have clearly passed it but let's keep going and see what happens.

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guys pls,
-downvote the gallery,
-and stop feeding the attention seeking gallery poster
-theyre just getting off on being a pariah like alex jones

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Well, I would sponsor an translation; but I doubt if an million credits would matter much to you guys

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Put me on screencap

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actual translation of this chapter found here: https://e-hentai.org/g/2436397/eb4f38d8cf/

cya bozo

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from the comments of other post and timing I guess this person is fluent in chinese and was trying to translate both language, hence the fairly good CH translation and the questionable quality in EN

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My guy, of course your gallery would get a lot of view if you're updating the gallery every page you make. Can't you at least have the decency to only update the gallery once you have fully completed your translation like any other normal guy? When you shit, you flush after you have finished and not at every piece shit you dropped, right? Same thing.

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@RabidTanker
I have fixed that. Thanks

@meganekov3
come on, man
I just checked
there are currently over 7000 galleries with "ongoing" in title
not to mention those are still ongoing but not tagged so

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Can't this be reported under 'Excessive Updates'?

"Bump Limit: To prevent front page abuse galleries will be locked if they are updated more than 2 times per 30 days."

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99% sure it doesn't count thanks to core content being added each time

never forget: the rules on this site are not here for the health and safety of the scene. they're here so the pubbies are pacified and don't cause a shitstorm which causes more works for the poor, overworked, volunteer jannies and tenboro.

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"You thought this doujin's first translation was with Jojo. But it was I, DIO!"

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Why are we still here ? Only to suffer...

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It’s baaaaaack

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Finally completed

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My God, this typesetting and school team, my English is poor and I feel wrong

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很喜欢英语网友的两句话
Never come back.
Fuck you and fuck off.

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