i only skimmed it but awkward english aside, it looked like there were a few weird changes

009
OG: 私の手に感触だけを残して
TL: "Leaving me only with the sensation of my hands"
ED: she's saying she was only left with the sensation (of his cock) in her hands

011
OG: ああ…♡あな…たぁ…もっと…
TL: "You-r sti..."
ED: "Honey...more..."

016
OG: とうとうわたしぃ…っ…♡♡
TL: "Fath-Fathe- I-"
ED: she's saying "finally" not "fath-fathe-" (directly related to the next part of the bubble)

017
OG: は、はげし…ひっ…ひび…くぅ…つ…♡♡
TL: "M-my hips...movin' on it's own"
ED: she's saying he's being rough

OG: あ…っ…♡
TL: "(so hot insi-)"
ED: this is just a moan

021
you wrote お義母様 instead of お義父様

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Old man was oddly patient for NTR.

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Can someone explain to me how how poorly translated uploads get above 2 stars?

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Its poorly translated but not bad enough to cause headache
Which after the flood of shit translations we have got is a high praise

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Thanks rsx205 for the feedback, I'm still studying Japanese so I made some (incorrect) assumptions on 11,16, and 17. For 9 I took a little more liberal approach to the translation to tie the feeling of the cock in her hands to being left to using her hands for masturbation in the next panel.

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Well...I guess at least the kid is dad's anyway. Probably only has to worry about getting physically cucked while she's pregnant. Emotionally though, he's fully cucked through and through.

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