Was working on this when the first translation came out. It missed a bit of dialogue. Hopefully this is a bit better. I did get stuck on page 19. I'll probably work on the latest iwasi r doujin.
Thanks for doing this justice. The other uploader is a notorious troll uploading MTL'ed versions of the chinese translation, so I would say it'd be safe to consider any of his uploads untranslated. It's also nice to see people translating the afterword.