Nice to see your translation has increased in quality.

Keep it up.

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This was good, but I can't help but wonder how confused this guy's gunna be about how he sexually enslaved 4 girls without ever meeting them when they go to him in the real world.

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003
OG: おひんぽ
TL: "Ah-eh!"
ED: this isn't a moan

OG: おっ♥イグ♥ほっほッ♥
TL: "Ohooo!"
ED: this is more than a moan

005
OG: ううん大丈夫だよなんでもないから
TL: "Since you said it's nothing, sorry for bringing it up"
ED: made up line, wrong speaker

007
OG: 好き♥ノワール奥村意は♥
TL: "I lost! I'm Noir and my real name is Haru Okumura!"
ED: she doesn't say she lost, she says something else

OG: 心の怪盗団のクイーン俺がお前の心を逆に奪ってやるからなｗ上手くねこれ
TL: "I, Queen, from the phantom thieves of heart will win this game and steal your heart!"
ED: made up line, wrong speaker

OG: 上手くねこれ
TL: N/A
ED: untranslated

OG: でかッ
TL: "Hoh!"
ED: this isn't a moan

008
OG: おほっ♥イグッ♥ちんぽ♥これムリィ♥
TL: "Your lovely cock has made me cum!"
ED: made up line

OG: まけ♥はいぼく♥アクメさいこぉイグイグ♥
TL: "Please give me more of this pleasure!"
ED: made up line, she's not asking for more pleasure

009
OG: えっ…真？
TL: "Huh? Are those illusions?"
ED: made up line, she isn't talking about illusions

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Goddamnit, this should be tagged as rewrite then

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