Beyond the grammar and machine translation you also used the wrong 1280x downsized resolution and your typesetting is questionable to say the least.
p.2 mid-career > this doesn't mean anything. how can she be "mid-career" when she's 23?? p.6 NG > ? p.7 who have lower salary than me > a lower salary/get paid less than I do p.7 to touch > the touch/being touched p.8 you have good manners > this expression is completely out of place p.9 this is bad here in the public > the public would refer to an audience. IN public p.10 ettiquette p.11 But please don't be the one to pull my leg > another complete out of place expression. p.12 isn't this just regular massage > a p.15 you've been squeezing my fingers stronger and stronger > harder p.18 cunnilinngus
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Base +23, funk_u_up +13, Kaisigmu +7, xyg9449 +6, veehs +5