Good translation. A little too stringent with words though. Imagine using lingo people would speak in a normal situation and their class (I.E. Elite, Upper, Middle, Lower, and Poor)
Example: Page 17, last panel, the maid's conversation.
Maid: Manager, he's really nice but he's more persistent than he looks. I don't like him.
Manager: What are you talking about. Serve him and squeeze him dry!
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Maybe something more like:
Maid: Look boss, that guy may seem all geeky and nice, but he's a lot stronger and more perverted than he looks. I don't want to--
Manager: What are you talking about? You're a MAID! Serve him well and squeeze him dry for a good review on the socials!