Look pretty good to me, but maybe you can ask some advice people here who more veteran at this.

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Reiju one updated, next pudding

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I respect the effort, but the translation needs work. Would love to see Mikanberry translated.

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Keep it up, it’s painful that robins right at the end though hah.

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Oh man, I can't believe someone is actually translating this! big congrats man, this is one I wanted to see translated the most (Dressdrossa's one being the second), it's a great shame that Mikanberry stopped before he ever did a CG work with Yamato but this is a great way of honoring his memory :3 Just the Robin and Harem parts left now!

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I don't know if it's a good translation but in terms of edit it has to be redone a bit like the balloons should be blurry and not with white and the sfx are missing, with a cut on 2 images it could have been done, however excellent attempt 👍🏻

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