It's my first translation... I'f there are any errors, let me know!

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@HyzQuadriceps
P 4
Text on upper right panel. Perhaps a thicker white stroke? Or maybe just move all the text higher and use white text instead?
Text is a bit hard to see but that might just be me.
P 18
"I'm not making weird sounds, am I?"
Use question mark, not exclamation mark, as it's supposed to be a question.
P 22
BOTTOMLESS... you typo'd with BOTTOMTLESS

Don't know about translation accuracy but I can say it doesn't look like a rewrite at least. Nice work overall. Better than stuff that gets tagged with rough grammar.

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@gh7734
Thanks for the review.
I reread multiple time the comic and I didn't notice the typo...
For the question mark, In the original there's an exclamation mark instead and I was misled

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1. I wouldn't add SFX translations in the margins. That's something that was done years ago when scanlators didn't know better. Unless you're going to clean, redraw, and then letter SFX, don't bother with them.
2. Your white stroke is often too small here. Compare to JP.

By the way, you can update your galleries.

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@HyzQuadriceps Ay it's great on my end and thank you for translating !

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That bikini really pushed Anis into the moon.

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Spoi Summer Anis and Shikicum almost had sex in her bond story until she get distracted by something (Shikicum did it with bikini Helm until morning tho) so having this doujin was a bless.

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@Yefta
on what chapter or event did shikicum had seggs with summer helm?

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@cutegyaru
I was going to clean, translate and letter the SFXs but the hardest part was to translate the onomatopoeia, I found a dictionary but I couldn't find some and i gave up.

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@Gads I think in chapter 4 or 5 in her bond story Helm ask to teach about what love is and Shikicum proceed to deep kiss and teach her about LOVE until morning. Shikicum really got great character development from try to refuse or avoid having some sex to Rizzler or NIKKE magnet even lead them into night battle 🤣

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I think you confused horizontal and vertical. Or maybe the author did

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