Hello, this is my first time scanlating. I hope it turned out ok; please let me know any feedback/criticism/questions/tips/etc., thank you.
This is the updated version with an overhaul to text bubbles, minor grammar fixes and minor script fixes, thank you.
https://e-hentai.org/g/1258000/5dda79b8c1/ (JP Version Volume 1)

bruh is that comic sans?

also center align the text

post update: looks great now. good job 👍

Last edited on 24 September 2023, 17:34.

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nah it's ccVictorySpeech
and ok my bad i'll go fix that

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Pretty good for a first attempt. Along with center-aligning the text, a few of the text boxes can be more vertically centered (page 10 "Sakuya!" for example). Text size can be reduced a bit in a few places as well to improve legibility, page 25 for example. When the text is hugging the corners it makes it feel a bit cramped and also doesn't leave many options as to where in the sentence to wrap to the next line. Could maybe avoid merging the bubbles on page 11 with that as well. Thanks for doing the afterword and the furigana as well. It's a crime that a long running Morino Hon series hasn't been taken up by now so I'll be cheering for you if you do more of them.

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Thank you for the encouragement and advice, I really appreciate it
I'll try and implement the changes to the best of my ability
And I agree, Morino Hon is one of my favorites and from what I've read thus far it's a real gem, definitely needs more recognition

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Poor Meiling

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Hmm. If this artist's Reimu finds the SDM crew so distasteful and troublesome, one would think she'd be inclined to help them leave, not stop them.

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