02: selfish n carefree => selfish 'n' carefree 02: wantto => want to 04: reacted [...] hear - inconsistent tense => reacted [...] heard 05: i'm go - present continuous uses participle => i'm going - alternatively, present simple works here too => i go 07: afterall => after all 10: Do you get it?! - idiom => Got it?! 11: shes actually happy - auxiliary => she's actually happy 16: sensei's cock please give all of it only to me - Japanese syntax => please give all of sensei's cock only to me 18: in the cheek - wrong preposition => on the cheek 18: [...] i love it - Japanese syntax => I love [...] 19: if you don't do it [...] then no - incoherent => i want you to do it [...] 21: is open show me - distinct clauses => is open, show me / is open. Show me 22: he said cute to me - incoherent? => he called me cute 23: drooling - missing subject => I'm drooling 24: alot => a lot 25: to be sensei's hand - preposition needed here => to be by sensei's hand 26: in my clit - wrong preposition => on my clit