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[miniru] Junboku Joshikousei wa Oyaji Iro ni Somerarete Comic Ban Ch. 2 [English]

[miniru] 純朴女子校生はオヤジ色に染められて コミック版 第2話 [英訳]

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Posted:2023-10-07 16:22
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Visible:No (Expunged)
Language:English  TR
File Size:9.05 MiB
Length:24 pages
Favorited:285 times
Rating:
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Average: 4.32

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Posted on 07 October 2023, 16:22 by:   noname932    PM
Uploader Comment
Artist Pixiv: https://www.pixiv.net/en/users/3065774

Support the artist, buy the original manga here: https://www.dlsite.com/books/work/=/product_id/BJ498419.html

My second upload, I starting to get used
Posted on 07 October 2023, 16:23 by:   noname932    PM
Score +20
My second upload, I starting to get used to translating manga, again, please comment if you notice any error or mistake.

I'm considering doing commission if there's a request ($1 per page, more if there are lots of texts).

If anyone is interested, please contact me via email: euprope7@gmail.com

Or DM me on discord: noname932

For now, I intend to translate this series regardless.
Posted on 07 October 2023, 17:23 by:   Vivi1993    PM
Score +57
I would recommend you to upload all of the chapters you have of this series in a single gallery that you update as you go through the series instead of a seperate gallery for every single chapter so people don't have to switch galleries constantly when reading through the story. When you go to your uploads and "manage" a gallery you can add more files to it and then rename it to include "Chapters 1- 2" and then "Chapters 1- 3" in the title etc.
Posted on 07 October 2023, 17:43 by:   Coledas Ukgent    PM
Score +27
Good job man! Let's go to the next one.

Part 1:https://e-hentai.org/g/2698133/e1c1aaf323/
Posted on 07 October 2023, 17:55 by:   noname932    PM
Score +6
@Vivi1993

Thank you. I'll make sure to do that on my next upload
Posted on 07 October 2023, 18:09 by:   mish2001    PM
Score +7
Man, chapter 3 is where penetration begins... wtf
Posted on 07 October 2023, 19:52 by:   cutegyaru    PM
Score +50
I just skimmed over the first page for the translation, so i'm not gonna comment on that. That being said, your editing and phrasing need work, especially if you're thinking of asking for money (which you absolutely shouldn't in your current state.)

1. You're missing punctuation. Periods, commas, and whatnot aren't optional in English.
2. Your text is often misshaped or too big. Your text should be centered in the text bubbles/boxes, and not touch the borders. Guide below.
3. There's ESL English and grammatical errors in there. In fact, there's enough for me to tag this gallery.

General: https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/
Typesetting: https://web.archive.org/web/20190406011154/https://fallensyndicate.wordpress.com/typesetting-tutorial/
Redrawing: https://web.archive.org/web/20150421210157/http://www.redhawkscans.com/showthread.php?7057-Rain-s-Redraw-Tutorials
Basic cleaning: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PANrCwHy630

rough grammar

p.4 I don't to burden
p.4 his club's practice > his club practice/activities
p.4 these long hours of week-end's part-time work > there long weekend hours I spend at work
p.4 has become > have become
p.5 if he try
p.5 disposal good > ? this isn't English
p.5 I was secluded at place
p.6 with such kind personality > such a kind
p.6 was all just a lie > a person can't be a lie, at least not in the way you've constructed the sentence
p.7 made her cried

and more.
Posted on 07 October 2023, 20:57 by:   noname932    PM
Score +6
@cutegyaru

Thanks a lot, I'll try to revise and fix typos and grammar mistakes on my next upload
Posted on 08 October 2023, 15:51 by:   Yukipo~    PM
Score +6
You know I think at this point she would have asked her dad or someone else if they are actually in debt with this old man and if she really has to become a sex slave but oh well, we wouldn't have the ball rolling if logical thinking existed, am I right? Kek

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