If you have any feedback please comment here or on my DeviantArt page https://www.deviantart.com/lylaleluu

now it's starting to get interesting :)

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That's why I didn't want to post it here earlier. There's a lot more to come!

On my DeviantArt page I'll publish a page a day for this comic. I'm not sure though if I should do the same here.

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This seems to have a lot of the same issues your other comics have. I can only strongly recommend taking a few creative writing classes or at least reading some guides. When you do, a lot of the issues will become glaringly obvious to you.

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Thank you for checking out my other comics as well. Indeed, creative writing (or writing in general) is my biggest weakness. I have struggled with it all my life and I'm not sure I can improve but I'm certainly trying (though apparently mostly failing).

Last edited on 26 June 2023, 17:14.

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You can check Brandon Sanderson's creative writing course from BYU on his youtube channel, for example. It was quite engaging (even though i'm not a writer).

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Thank you for the recommendation, Nitram Nede. I'll check it out.

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@Franstein

Given that this is a daily, I would suggest bundling the updates here and only doing it something like once a week.

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Thank you for the input, @rwpikul. I agree. My last update was on the 29th of August so I think we're good. ;)
Of course if you want to keep up with the daily update, please feel invited to visit my DeviantArt page https://www.deviantart.com/lylaleluu.
Also if you consider supporting me, I now also have a Patreon account: https://www.patreon.com/lylaleluu

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Likes:
1. the changes in both directions M2F and F2M.
2. art is unique as well as well maintained throughout the comic.
3. the beginnings of acceptance to the female "duplicate" role.

Dislikes:
1. writing is weak (ever consider a ghost writer?).
2. jumps scenes too much and leaves out the life details with his "wife".
3. censorship of the images with the "18" over the good parts, why? This is a very adult website.

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